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Oct 16 – Parallel Structure Examples

1. My dog is not only friendly but also playful.
2. We can go to the park, or dance in the classroom.
3. Jeremy likes to read historical, realistic, and speculative fiction.
4. When I went to the bar, I wanted to dance, drink, and punch on the rowdy faces.
5. Buying a car is not a decision to take lightly, or carelessly.
6. Tyler is for the legalization, not criminalization of marijuana.
7. Sally needs a new stove, dishwasher, and set of knives for her kitchen.
8. My first grade teacher taught me how to write, read, and play tic-tac-toe.
9. She will not admit it, nor will she apologize.
10. The whole wheat pasta is better than the enriched wheat pasta.
11. Literature classes teaches students to analyze texts, think critically, and improve writing.
12. Beets are just as nutrient rich as rutabagas, even though they are not in season.
13. Drunk drivers are thoughtlessly taking the lives of other people in their own hands, risking their own lives, thinking only about their own pleasure and fun, and not considering the consequences of their actions.
14. In order to convey the information correctly, the police officer spoke loudly, told people where they should stand, and repeated the information to help people remember and gestured at the people.
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Oct 11 – Social Media Rhetorical Analysis

Mark Zuckerberg on Facebook

Mark Zuckerberg writes in first person on majority of his Facebook posts to show his authority, for example, “I just announced a new way to use your hands in virtual reality that we’ve been working on for a while.” Although Mark writes in first person in many of his posts, he gives credit to the community and his employee for success, showing that he is not taking all the credit for himself. Mark also claims his authority by talking about his personal experiences in a post discussing about US immigrants, “I’ve gotten to know Dreamers as my hard-working students, friends and neighbors. They deeply want to contribute to the community and country they grew up in, and they deserve to be part of our future.”

https://www.facebook.com/zuck

 

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Run-On and Comma Splice Practice

1) The chickens on campus play a famous role for our school, they make us unique.

Type: Correct

The chickens on campus play a famous role for our school, they make us unique.

 

2) What if the chickens laid eggs and hid them somewhere they would get left behind.

Type: Run-on

What if the chickens laid eggs and hid them somewhere? They would get left behind.

 

3) The chickens bring laughter to our students, without them we’d be an ordinary school.

 Type: Correct

The chickens bring laughter to our students, without them we’d be an ordinary school. 

 

4) I remember, after my first class I was leading out to the bookstore unfortunately, I stepped on the chickens’ dump.    

Type: Comma Splice

I remember that after my first class I was leading out to the bookstore; unfortunately, I stepped on the chickens’ dump. 

 

5) Right now there many chickens living freely on campus but many professors don’t

want chickens.  Type__Run-on__

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6) Chickens should not be allowed to live freely on the campus because they cause stinky odors make noise and no one wants to clean after.      Type__Run-on__

Chickens should not be allowed to live freely on the campus, because they cause stinky odors make noise and no one wants to clean after. 

 

7) Anytime students want to lie down on the lawn they need a place that look clean and have a fresh air therefore they can not take a nap or study.  Type: Run-on

Anytime students want to lie down on the lawn, they need a place that look clean and have a fresh air. Therefore, they can not take a nap or study.  

 

8)  But I strongly disagree with that opinion, chickens should not be allowed on campus at all.

  Type: Comma Splice

 But, I strongly disagree with that opinion; chickens should not be allowed on campus at all.

 

9) During the time students are in the lab if the chickens make a lot a noise the students won’t focus to do their job.  Type: Run-on

During the time, students are in the lab if the chickens make a lot a noise the students won’t focus to do their job.

 

10) In conclusion, if the chickens live freely on campus because students let them live free then these students should clean the chicken’s mess.   Type: Comma splice

In conclusion, if the chickens live freely on campus because students let them live free then these students should clean the chicken’s mess.

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Oct 2 – In Class Writing: Google Translation

Original

李白 – 静夜思

床前明月光,
疑是地上霜。
舉頭望明月,
低頭思故鄉。

Google Translated 

Li Bai – Still Nights

In front of the bed, moonlight,
Suspected to be frost on the ground.
Looking up at the moon,
Looking down at hometown.

Analysis 

Generally, the translations are accurate. However, the translated version lack the emotions that were in the original text. The original text consist of  detailed imagery, but not the translated version. The translated version appears to be direct and lack the cohesiveness that describes a story, which the original text did. In the translated version, some Chinese words had to be further elaborated for the translation to make sense, therefore the translated version also appears to be “explaining” the context.

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Sept 25 – Library Research Writing

Fusion Energy

Almost everything in the world today are powered by electricity. However, the majority of our energy production are inefficient and bad for the environment. The emersion of nuclear fission and other renewable power plants are not convincing enough for us to switch out our old yet “easy” ways to produce energy, for example, coal-fired power plants. Many scientists believe that fusion energy is a great alternative, “Fusion holds the promise of providing a practically limitless supply of clean energy to the world.”( Committee on Science, 2014, p. 7). Fusion energy is scientifically recognized to be one of the cleanest and most efficient energy source, and the world should focus on making the transition to developing fusion energy instead of wasting more money on old and inefficient energy sources.

 

References

Fusion : the world’s most complex energy project : hearing before the Subcommittee on Energy, Committee on Science, Space, and Technology, House of Representatives, One Hundred Thirteenth Congress, second session, July 11, 2014. (2014). U.S. Government Printing Office.

 

link to article

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Sept 23 – American Idioms

Money Talks

Example: Money Talks. Try increasing the wage of your workers, and they might just work harder than usual.

This idiom is fairly self explanatory. Using money to convince or get a conversation going, or to get the result you want.

 

Blue Monday

Example: The weekend is over, tomorrow is Blue Monday.

To be blue is to be sad, which is why it is used to express the sadness when a weekend comes to an end. I think blue is depicted as sad because of its darker tone, comparing to yellow, yellow has a brighter and uplifting tone.

 

Have no Stomach

Example: I have no stomach today to complete any of my assignments.

To have no ambition or lack of desire. This may come from that if you don’t have a stomach, you cannot eat; meaning that you don’t have any desire or ambition.

 

A Hen Party

Example: She and her friend are going to a hen party tonight.

A gathering of women. This idiom is some what self explanatory, as “Hen” represents women, and “Party” represents a gathering.

 

A Lone Wolf

Example: He’s a lone wolf, he likes working on projects by himself.

Wolfs naturally hunt as packs. It is out of the ordinary for a wolf to be alone. When someone is being a lone wolf, it means that they are choosing/preferring to be alone.

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Sept 20 – In Class Writing: Rhetorical Analysis (Anthony & Bolun)

A photo of the Ebola Epidemic in West Africa (Oct. 19 2014) by Daniel Berehulak, a freelance photographer of The New York Times. In the photo, an Ebola survivor named George Beyan was holding his 5-year-old son, William,  who tested positive for Ebola. The staffs at the treatment center told George that he would be the best person to take care of his son, since he was immune to Ebola after surviving it. The son, William, died a few days after this photo was taken.

The purpose of this photo is to demonstrate the bond between the father and the son during the darkest times. Regardless of the situation, human are always looking out for each other. The audience of this photo is everyone in the world who are not experiencing the Ebola Epidemic. Emotional appeal is used in this argument. By showing a close relationship between a father and a son during dark times, audiences who are a father or have a family will feel empathetic toward the figures in the photo. It is also interesting to think about how there are no actual “argument” being made. Instead, we are simply being presented with a carefully captured photo that tells a story about the Ebola epidemic in West Africa.

 

Link to Photo

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Sept 16 – In Class Writing: Sophie, Angill, Anthony

Today, many believe that Failure is acceptable and essential to success and growth. However, Article 2 suggest that people ignore the fact that failure affect people differently. For example, someone who comes from a low income family, not reaching a certain GPA can lead to the inability to receive a scholarship for college. In this case, failure has a greater impact to a low income student comparing to a student in comparison does not have any financial struggles. The article suggest that teachers should tell students who are low-income or first-generation that they are “good enough”, “they are worthy of succeeding”, “they belong at the school”, “don’t be afraid to ask for help”. Teachers should be inclusive and encouraging when students fail, instead of punishing them for their academic struggles.

In the article, the author talked about his experience in college as a business student. Comparing to his more privileged peers, he was a low-income student and struggles financially. An entrepreneur who gave a talk to him said he received $50,000 to start his own company, but goes bankrupt in his first year. The entrepreneur said from experience that it is “it’s OK to fail”. To the author, this statement was incredibly inconsiderate and not inclusive. As a low-income student himself, he could never have receive that kind of financial fund and risk it like the entrepreneur has. Concluding that it is not always “OK” to fail, especially to students who are struggling financially.

Link to Article

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Sept 9 – Literacy Narrative Example

Literacy Narrative: Struggle and Growth

The author transferred from Georgia College to Georgia State University. Before transferring to Georgia State University, she claimed that she had high a GPA when she was in Georgia College. When She transferred to Georgia State University, she comfortable with her writing skills and changed her major to English. She later found out that she was struggling in her new British American Literature class, and felt “more than unprepared”. She had to consult her professor to address her concerns on writing. She later earned a grade of B on her first paper, the lowest grade she has every received in college. To her, her struggle helped her improved her writing and showed her what she was lacking. From this literacy narrative, I learned that struggling is a way of learning and that if you only stay within your comfort zone, you are not learning to your best ability.

Link to Literacy Narrative