10/18/2019

1. My dog is not only friendly but also playful.
correct
2. We can go to the park or dancing in the classroom.
We can go to the park or dance in the classroom.
3. Jeremy likes to read historical, realistically and speculative fiction.
correct
4. When I went to the bar, I want to dance, drinking and punch on the rowdy faces.
When I went to the bar, wanted to dance, drank and punched on the rowdy faces.
5. Buying a car is not a decision to take lightly nor be careless about.
Buying a car is not a decision to take lightly nor carelessly.
6. Tyler is for the legalization, not criminalization of marijuana.
correct
7. Sally needs a new stove, dishwasher and knives for her kitchen.
Sally needs a new stove, dishwasher and  a set of knives  for  her kitchen.
8. My first grade teacher taught me how to write, how to read and play tic-tac-toe.
My first grade teacher taught me how to write, read and play tic-tac-toe.
9. She will not admit it, nor will she be apologizing.
She will not admit it, nor will be apologizing.
10. The whole wheat pasta is better than enriched wheat pasta.
The whole wheat pasta is better than enriched one.
11. Literature classes teach students to analyze texts, thinking critically, and improve writing.
Literature classes teach students to analyze texts, think critically, and improve writing.
12. Beets are just as nutrient rich as rutabagas even though they are not in season.
correct
13. Drunk drivers are thoughtlessly taking the lives of other people in their own hands,
risk their own lives, thinking only about their own pleasure and fun, and not consider the consequences of
their actions.
Drunk drivers are thoughtlessly taking the lives of other people in their own hands,
risking their own lives, thinking only about their own pleasure and fun, and not considering the consequences of
their actions.
14. In order to convey the information correctly, the police officer spoke loudly to the crowd ,tell people where they should stand, repeated the information to help people remember, and gesture.
In order to convey the information correctly, the police officer spoke loudly to the crowd ,told people where they should stand, repeated the information to help people remember, and gestured.

10/11/2019 in class writing

I found an interesting post on WeChat, which is posted by my roommate. He said that Samsung Note 10 is awesome and its S-Pen translation is greater than google translation. Moreover he said he still need to continue to explore more consciousness and discoveries about this phone made by Samsung team.

In my opinion, I think he lies electronic products in daily life and comparing the differences between each brand and product.

10.2 in class writing

Cindy & Eric & Sam

1. The chickens on campus play a famous role for our school, they make us unique.
Type: CS
Correct:The chickens on campus play a famous role for our school, and they make us unique.
2.What if the chickens laid eggs and hid them somewhere they would get left behind.

Type: R
Correct: What if the chickens laid eggs and hid them somewhere, they would get left behind.
3.The chickens bring laughter to our students, without them we’d be an ordinary

school.
Type:CS
Correct: The chickens bring laughter to our student. Without them, we’d be an ordinary

school.
4.I remember, after my first class I was leading out to the bookstore unfortunately, I

stepped on the chickens’ dum.
Type:CS
Correct: I remember, after my first class, I was leading out to the bookstore. Unfortunately, I

stepped on the chickens’ dum.
5.Right now there many chickens living freely on campus but many professors don’t

want chickens.
Type:R
Correct: Right now there many chickens living freely on campus, but many professors don’t

want chickens.
6. Chickens should not be allowed to live freely on the campus because they cause

stinky odors make noise and no one wants to clean after.
Type:R
Correct: Chickens should not be allowed to live freely on the campus because they cause

stinky odors, make noise, and no one wants to clean after.
7. Anytime students want to lie down on the lawn they need a place that look clean and

have a fresh air therefore they can not take a nap or study.
Type:R
Correct: Anytime students want to lie down on the lawn, they need a place that look clean and

have a fresh air. Therefore they can not take a nap or study.
8. But I strongly disagree with that opinion, chickens should not be allowed on campus

at all.
Type: C
9. During the time students are in the lab if the chickens make a lot a noise the students

won’t focus to do their job.
Type:R
Correct: During the time students are in the lab, if the chickens make a lot a noise, the students

won’t focus to do their job.
10.In conclusion, if the chickens live freely on campus because students let them live

free then these students should clean the chickens mess.
Type:R
Correct: In conclusion, if the chickens live freely on campus because students let them live

free, then these students should clean the chickens mess.

10.2 in class writing

The Chinese poem:

绿蚁新醅酒,红泥小火炉。

晚来天欲雪,能饮一杯无。

Translation:

Green ant new wine, red mud small stove.
I want to drink a cup of coffee in the evening.

 

I think the interesting part is although the poem mentioned “ant”, the real meaning of that part is just rice-wine is green without ant.

9.23 in class writing

“Let the cat out of the Bag” means someone didn’t keep the secret.

“Get in Someone’s hair” means provoke someone to anger.

“Pay Through The Nose” means something or items costs a lot of money .

“Get Off Someone’s Back” means don’t disturb others.

“Wet Blanket” means a person who is not enthusiastic about anything and who stops other people from enjoying themselves.

9.23

Eric&Lou&Will

The company calls the Philips vacuum cleaner “a small animal at home” that is considered to be flexible and highly attractive. Philips uses the octopus to describe the flexibility and high suction of its vacuum cleaner, which has attracted the attention of consumers.

The advertisement is aimed at the owners or workers because they are worried about the cleanliness of the house. The vacuum cleaner draws dust from the floor and carpet. In addition, the term “small animals at home” means that the vacuum cleaner is specifically for the family rather than the business premises.

 

https://www.google.com.hk/url?sa=i&rct=j&q=&esrc=s&source=images&cd=&ved=2ahUKEwjU-6D57OfkAhWDMX0KHV6gD3AQjRx6BAgBEAQ&url=https%3A%2F%2Fsalifex.com%2Fblog%2Fphilips-ad-analysis%2F&psig=AOvVaw0L_058T3WpcErY0U_YVI0I&ust=1569359226418640

 

 

Eric&Sam&Will

From the article of Jeff Ludovici, he introduced an example he met during his career, once one parents take their son to ask him for help, their son is good performance at the high school, but turn to bad when he get in university. Even though his parents help him transfer to another community college. The circumstance had no change. After the contact between Pro Jeff and this student. Pro Jeff realized that the frustrations of this student are that he didn’t know what he can do after he graduate and high pressure from the high expectation of his parents, so that Pro Jeff give him some advice to him and his parents. Therefore, their parents lower their expectation and he also found what he can do after he graduated.

 

Compared to the Mary’s article. Pro Mary thinks that the action which “Flunking”students without any help from the Professors is wrong. Because their bad academic performance don’t mean that they are “bad”students. Someone might just hard to concentrated on their academy and someone might lose their direction of future career so that they refute to handling knowledge because they think that knowledge is useless after they graduate.

Ref: Ludovici, J., & Ludovici, J. L. J. (n.d.). Jeff Ludovici. Retrieved from https://collegestrategyblog.com/true-stories-a-college-failure-turned-to-success/

 

https://collegestrategyblog.com/true-stories-a-college-failure-turned-to-success/

9.9 in class writing

http://www.thedaln.org/#/detail/26373d0b-9100-493c-ad77-68af7b788ab5

 

The two audios talked about Dorian and Catherine’s experience about their identities as the writing center tutors and they explain how their jobs as the tutor at the writing center at Montana State University has contributed to their identities as a reader and writer.

The reason I chose this audio is I like their experiences which I have not experienced ever, and I want to hire a job like them someday.

As they all talked about, their writing skills have improved becuase of their jobs and the job has helped them become a more literate being. That’s what I would like to learn, if I want to develop my own audio literacy narrative project, I could hire a part-time job which relates to reading and writing.

9.6 in class writing

After I read my peer, Yi’s discussion, I found something similar to mine. For instance, we both mentioned the importance of using ethos during writing. As he said, “ethos is the first thing we see, so it creates the first impression and influences how we take the rest of information”, which is the point I totally agree with. Also, we talked about the using ethos to make credibility and realized that future success is linked to an ability to project a convincing ethos for themselves.

 

https://spark.adobe.com/video/KrlAUuQVEtsQt

9.4 free writing

I’ll make the audio video about my unforgettable trip in 2018. Last winter I went to United Kingdom with my friend and the best place I think is Edinburgh. Through this video, I wold like to share my best memory about another country’s culture with classmates so that everyone could experience the different kind of lifestyle even if someone is not go there at all.  As we all know, United Kingdom is different form U.S or even China, that is also the reason I came there, I want to experience different culture like traditional food and transports and oral English and so on, which is the interesting part of my video I think. Therefore, I would like share some best visiting places which are if you go there someday, you won’t miss those because those are amazing and worthing going there.

Through this video I’ll make, I think it’s a good way to share personal lifestyle and experience with others and people could know more about me and  I could use my own experience to let others consider if traveling is a good way to relax and enjoy life.

Brief audio essay pitch:The story I would like to share is about my last trip in Edinburgh. We went to the castle first, although the weather was bad that day, we had a lot of fun because the building is very awesome and grand. Moreover, I think it’s a way to learn about the Edinburgh’s history. Through this trip, I learned a lot about Scottish culture and history, which enriched my life experience.