Write out post module 1

Here is the structure of my first speech:

 

My name is Matt and I’ll be assessing the credibility of Jay Walder, CEO of Motivate bike share which is currently partnering with Ford to produce the Gobike initiative. The Gobike initiative is similar to Citibike, which is a bike share that covers the five boroughs of New York City.

To judge Jay Walder, I will be reviewing his believability and intelligence as well as his overall credibility based on a speech Walder gave at the Gobike launch in July.

 

In terms of believability, I was fairly convinced by Walder’s enthusiasm for the Gobike initiative. What made me partly believe in Walder’s speech was his proficient use of body language and tone to attempt to captivate his audience. When Walder was talking he used his hands to fill the awkward void that is created when you don’t move your hands; instead of keeping his hands still at his sides, Walder coordinated his gestures to emphasize different points he was making (example hyperbole, large hand gesture).

Similar to body language, Walder used the tone of his voice to emphasize the different points he was making. At a point in his speech Walder was explaining the rapid growth of Gobike and while explaining this, Walder raised his voice to express his confidence and excitement in the Gobike initiative.

Although semi-convincing, Walder’s enthusiasm alone does not make this speech particularly believable. What this speech is lacking is a sense of emotion from Walder. This emotion doesn’t need to be over-the-top, but I feel that if Walder truly cared about the success of Gobike and its effects on local communities (lack of virtue/goodwill), he would speak with more passion.

 

Walder’s enthusiasm helped him gain a bit of credibility with his audience but what reinforced his enthusiasm and his overall credibility was his intelligence.

Walder displayed a fair amount of intelligence through his physical appearance (presumed and reputed credibility) as well as through his use of facts and his attentiveness to who his audience was. What I presume and Walder’s reputation play to his advantage while assessing Walder’s intelligence.

For this speech, Walder is dressed in a business casual outfit, which to me implies that he usually works in an environment where he has a reputation to uphold (and has to be smart to uphold that reputation) and he is also a CEO.

Walder is also wearing glasses which immediately make him look smarter due to the popular social connotation (talk about connotation).

Another aspect of Walder’s appearance that makes him look intelligent is his age (talk about connotation with age).

A more concrete example of Walder’s intelligence is his use of facts. Although his speech is brief, Walder was able to use facts to reinforce his statements and to make himself seem more credible.

Another example that points to Walder’s intelligence is his perception of audience. Walder may not be from the bay area and he may not be passionate about public transportation or biking in general; but he knows that the crowd he is speaking to most definitely is. Through his use of tone and body language to create a sense of enthusiasm, Walder aligns himself with his audience to prove that he believes in the same future as they do, therefore gaining credibility.

 

Conclusion about overall credibility; pros of his credibility, cons of his credibility, “In conclusion”

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