After I read Romeo’s response, I recognize I have similar ideas with him.
- those three essays are promoted to lower the income inequality
- they all approach the “American Dream”
The feedback of Essay #2
Things I need to improve:
- I need to read the APA file deeply and fix the citation
- express my ideas and opinions deeply and clearly
- the title should not be italicized
In our video essay, there are three members in our group who are Freda, Hia-Ting and me. We distributed the work for each one equally. Freda is in the math major and Hua-Ting and I is in the business major. Therefore, we went to interview with professors first and then Freda to be responsible for editing the video. Afterward, we will record our voice and put into the video. The purpose of our video essay is to convince and persuade others to join our majors so we need to make our major interesting. Therefore, we went to the business and math club or some activities to take pictures.
This is our plan:
Business script: Penny, Hua-Ting
Interview: 3 members
Math: The structure of the math department, activity: why should we choose it, interview, the benefit, the introduction
Business: the future job, allow individuals not only develop personal skills but also the presentation and communication skills
Script: until Nov. 8th
Interview: before the end of Oct.
Shoot: until Nov. 5th
After I read Romeo’s response on Canvas, I believe we have similar ideas and feedbacks about this essay. First of all, we all think the Pengfei and his families are pitiful and sad about them because they were in an era which is very difficult to survive and live. The one-child rule made them lose lots of things such as the job and the learning opportunity as well. Secondly, we all believe we are all lucky that we have a good learning environment and can go to school to receive the education and also live in a very developed country which has high technology.