In Class Writing – November 15th

Reading response to Raha

  • The American Dream is less possible during the current times
  • Agree on making inequality fall would benefit the society
  • Both found the link between income inequality and physical pain interesting, but I wanted to have more evidence in terms of more numbers.

Essay 3

  • “What do you think of these ideas from both essays? A thesis?”

Adrees my own ideas clearly in the thesis statement and not only the key points from what I   have read

  • “Consider starting with summaries from both essays before synthesizing ideas.”

Summarise each essay before beginning to analyze and synthesize ideas.

  • “Support from a relevant source helps strengthen your point here.”

I understand that I should (in this case) include an outside source to support my statement at the end.

  • “Good way to present key ideas to conclude the essay; also, adding more as to what you could learn after reading these essays would make your conclusion more relevant to the discussion.”

In the future, I will have an additional focus on presenting what I have learned in order to make my conclusion stronger.

  • “References are done in alphabetical order, and book or journal titles are italicized (please see APA references pdf file under Modules).”

Remember to use alphabetical order and italicize titles of books and journals.


I now have more experience with the American way of writing a paper. Understanding how to include and use a thesis statement was new to me, but as i mentioned in the responses to the comments, I will now be able to clearly present my own opinion/idea. I am now more comfortable making a reference list using APA.



In Class Writing Nov 8th

Freda & Romeo

  1. The reality show follows the lives of Bruce and Kris Jenner’s combined family, and most of the episodes focus on the three oldest daughters, Kourtney, Kim, and Khloé Kardashian.
  2. Bruce Jenner was famous for breaking the world record and winning a gold medal in the decathlon at the 1976 Olympics; now his sons from a previous marriage, Brandon and Brody, have also appeared on their own reality shows.
  3. The Kardashians’ father, the late attorney Robert Kardashian, was famous for representing O. J. Simpson. Also, his daughters gained recognition as American socialites.
  4. Even though Kim came into the national spotlight in 2007 after a sex- tape scandal and resulting Playboy appearance, the Kardashian fame grew into a profitable reality series.
  5. The show depicts the daily routine of the Kardashians, and spin-off shows feature Kourtney, Kim, and Khloé’s attempts to build their line of fashion boutiques.
  6. The Kardashians’ behavior at first seemed outrageous, but they are a loving family.
  7. Although the Kardashians squabble like typical siblings, Kris, the mother, holds the family together.
  8. Although Kim’s $ 10 million wedding to pro basketball player Kris Humphries in 2011 was seen by an estimated 10.5 million viewers, the marriage lasted only 72 days.