Based on the feedback I received on my second essay, I think most of the points that I lost this time is the APA citation and the skill to synthesize ideas together. In this essay, I didn’t do well in synthesizing ideas into a well powerful paragraph, instead of that, i separate two of the essays into independent paragraphs, which did not show my ability to synthesize ideas. Thus, in future writing, I will try to point out the common ideas from both of the essays and compose them by using compare and contrast in order to show the connection between the two essays.
For a better thesis, I have to come up with my personal opinion, what do I want to claim based on the information given in the essays. How do you think the essays are effective, and what can you address the ideas into today’s world.
American Dream is supposed to be a goal that decrease inequality, and this act should ensure people to attain equal opportunity and outcome regardless of their birth, it is define as the effort people put in. However, through the three essayists, American Dream seems less possible to achieve in today’s world and that issue still continue, because three essayists pinpoint how inequality is based on race and how upper class do not pay attention to the lower class. The divide between rich and poor only create more negative effects to the poorer people as time progress.
Joanne has a similar idea with me about the online essay, “Global Digital Divide,” we both agree that the author expresses his passion that he has to his education, especially in, learning English. We admire Song’s enthusiasm on learning new language, even though English is not the popular language in China, but Song insist on practicing his English ability in writing and communicating very hard every day. Moreover, Song also points out how he start to access to using computer and also the technologies advance at that time.
Through this essay, not only we can see the developing technologies, but also Song’s efforts in learning and improving himself, despite growing up in the adversity, I found it very inspiring after reading Song’s essay because I can compare his lifestyle and mine, which I could find lots of shocking points by reading his essay.