11/18 In-Class Writing

It was January 17, 2005 and three cadets were training to become police detectives. The sergeant decided to test if they were skilled at recognizing a suspect. He showed the first cadet a picture for five seconds and then hid it. Then he said, “That was your suspect, how would you recognize him?”

“That’s easy”, answered the cadet. “We would find him fast because he only has one eye.”

The sergeant thought a minute and then answered, “Well that’s because the picture I showed you is a profile. It shows only a side view.” He could not believe the cadet had given him such a ridiculous answer, but he went on to the second cadet. Flashed the picture for five seconds to him. Again, he asks, “That was your suspect, how would you recognize him?”

The second cadet smiled and said, “It would be easy to catch, because he only has one ear!”.

The police sergeant shook his head in disbelief. Then angrily responded, “What’s the matter with you two? Of course, only one eye and one ear are showing, it’s a picture of his profile! Was that the best answer you can come up with?!”

Extremely frustrated at this point, he showed the picture to the 3rd cadet and in a very testy voice asked, “This is your suspect. How would you recognize him?” He quickly added, “Think hard before giving me a stupid answer.”

The cadet looked at the picture intently for a moment. Then she said, “The suspect wears contact lenses.”

The sergeant was speechless. He went to his office checked the suspects file in his computer and came back. He was beaming. “Its true! The suspect does indeed wear contact lenses. Tell us how you were able to make such an astute observation!”

“It was easy,” said the cadet. “He can’t wear glasses because he only has one eye and one ear.”

I strongly agreed with Abouye’s response to the article because of our association with our ethnic background. We were both born in America, with families that are heavily in touch with the ethnic aspect of their identity. We both feel distant and inferior. However, this does not prevent us from embracing our ethnicity and cause us to be ashamed of our identity because there are several other ways to express our individuality.

For example, Abouye stated in her response that our racial and ethnicity are only a few aspects of our identity. Other important features like the music we listen to, clothes we wear, where we grew up, etc. are also examples that contribute to our identity. If all aspects of our identity are not as embraced, this does not invalidate or lessen the value of our culture. She also made an interesting statement; everyone’s definition of “American”is different, so it is hard to categorize if one is truly American or not.




The most significant historical event that has positively shaped the future of America is the presidential election of Barack Obama.In November of 2008, America transformed into a country of hope and pride. The presidential election proved that anyone can achieve their dreams, regardless of their race. Obama has opened a door for people of color in the future and has shaped how other countries will view America. With said, he made a lasting impact and have influenced people’s leadership skills and own ideals.

In the political climate we live in today, I decided to focus on a more positive change our country has went through. Despite the fact that many people view Trump’s presidency as a downgrade, I also see this as an opportunity to become a better country than we ever were, even during Obama’s term. I selected Obama’s presidential election because it set the bar for high for people of color and proved a strong statement in underprivileged circumstances as well. 

Essay 2 Feedback 11/8

A common pattern of writing related issues within my essay is a more clear thesis and what kind of argument that the author makes. I have a decent analysis of quotes, but instead of citing it as “paragraph”, I should abbreviate it. Lastly, I can also work on my organization of the essay by including ideas in separate paragraphs instead of combining it. Lastly, I can work on my “References Page” by correctly formatting it in APA.

10/28 Multimodal Compositions Similarities/Differences In-Class Writing

Similarities and features of multimodal essays

  • included that making a script would help with organization for the video project
  • Using other features like animation and sound will be more interesting for the audience
  • Adding emotion in your voice will make video essay stand out

Verb Tenses Activity 10/25

For a long time, my stepson, Jonathan, was unhappy to have me as part of his family, for
he resented that he didn’t have both biological parents at home. I tried to get to know him
better, but he complained that I invaded his privacy. As a newcomer, I understood that
our relationship will require effort from both of us. It was not enough that I was friendly.
Jonathan also wants us to be friends, and I was not happy with the two of us being
strangers, but I can wait for him to feel more comfortable around me.
Anne Marie collects antique bottles and loves to turn them into works of art. She buys
bottles if she likes them, but she prefers to find them in the ground. She finds bottles
everywhere, but picks them selectively. However, she has the best luck at
construction sites on old farmland, where she spends most of her time. Often, bottles
appear on the surface after a good rain, but they disappear very soon. She uses
special tools for excavating bottles, including a set of brushes. She does not want to break
the bottles as she removes them from the ground. After finding a new bottle, Anne Marie
adds it to her display case and hangs on the wall as an artistic piece (Mangelsdorf,
2013, p. 411).

Video Essay Brainstorm Ideas 10/23

Ideas for Essay 3:

  • Interview: Saralyn Ruff about the crisis of students second guessing their major because of career choice (next week)
  • Prove how I want to integrate psychology with fashion
  • Integrate psychology with other subdisciplines one is passionate about
  • Requires some type of creativity
  • Mention interdisciplinary application assignment and how it helps students reflect more upon their major

Group Writing- 10/21 Mandy, Lou, Angill

Charlotte Clymer, a worker of the Human Rights Campaign, is arguing that presidential candidate Julian Castro deserves to stay in the presidential race. She quotes a tweet from him that mentioned that his campaign is underfunded and will be silenced if $800,000 is not raised by October 31st. Her main reason why she wants Julian Castro to stay in the debate is because he “was the first presidential candidate to bring up trans rights in a nationally televised debate.”

General Discussion on Essay 3- 10/21

3 key features of video essay:

  1. using audio/video editing software
  2. creating a narrative to read from for a voiceover
  3. effectively communicating with sounds, images, and videos

3 main requirements:

  1. using the library database
  2. analyze three sources: a textbook, scholarly article, interview with professor/expert from discipline
  3. use multimodal components to effectively communicate information and persuade incoming freshmen about your major

Activity 10/18

Parallel Structure Exercise

  1. My dog is not only friendly but also playful.


  1. We can go to the park or dancing in the classroom.

We can go to the park or dance in the classroom.

  1. Jeremy likes to read historical, realistically and speculative fiction.

Jeremy likes to read historical, realistic, and speculative fiction.

  1. When I went to the bar, I want to dance, drinking and punch on the rowdy faces.

When I went to the bar, I wanted to dance, drink, and punch on rowdy faces.

  1. Buying a car is not a decision to take lightly nor be careless about.

Buying a car is not a decision to take lightly or be carelessly about.

  1. Tyler is for the legalization, not criminalization of marijuana.


  1. Sally needs a new stove, dishwasher and a set knives for her kitchen.
  2. My first grade teacher taught me how to write, how to read and play tic-tac-toe.

My first grade teacher taught me how to write, read, and play tic-tac-toe.

  1. She will not be admitting it, nor will she be apologizing.
  2. The whole wheat pasta is better than enriched wheat pasta.
  3. correct
  4. Literature classes teach students to analyze texts, thinking critically, and improve writing.

Literature classes teach students to analyze texts, think critically, and improve writing.

  1. Beets are just as nutrient rich as rutabagas even though they are not in season.


  1. Drunk drivers are thoughtlessly takingthe lives of other people in their own hands, risk their own lives, thinking only about their own pleasure and fun, and not consider the consequences of their actions.
  2. Drunk drivers are thoughtlessly taking the lives of other people in their own hands, risking their own lives, thinking only about their own pleasure and fun, and not considering the consequences of their actions.
  3. In order to convey the information correctly, the police officer spokeloudly to the crowd, tell people where they should stand, repeatedthe information to help people remember, and gesture.

In order to convey the information correctly, the police officer spoke loudly to the crowd, told people where they should stand, repeated the information to help people remember, and gestured.


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