11/15 In Class Writing

Chinese economic reform is one of the most significant historical events in China. This reform establishes the economic foundation of China and become the most important reform to improve the development in China. This reform started on 18 December 1978 right after the cultural revolution which destroys the original order of China. During that time, the Chinese people live under famine and poverty. The government focuses on how to break the traditional thing which they think is “bad” but ignore the life of citizens. Chinese economic reform bring transfer to people which made them see the hope of this country. This reform issue some policies to help the countrysides improve agriculture to get out of poverty and also open lots of ports for trade to improve the economy. During that time, a lot of private companies existed because of the policy or assistance the government provided to them. This reform is the first stage that the Chinese economy open to the whole world. The development of Shenzhen is also the achievement this reform achieved.



11/6 Yongji/ Beidi/ Ivan

Excerpt from page 23 of an article in 2011 by William Ellis entitled “Culture in Transition.”
World problems such as poverty, pollution, war, and hunger are inherent in the current system of world order based on nation-states and economic competition. They can be solved if people know and understand one another on a global, grass-roots basis. By developing people-to-people linkages irrespective of national borders, we can start to ameliorate global tensions and inequities.
___Y__William Ellis asserts that world problems such as poverty, pollution, war, and hunger are
inherent in the current system of world order based on nation-states and economic
competition (p. 23). (No quotation mark) 
___Y__Global tensions and inequities can be solved if people begin to help one another on a grass-roots basis, moving beyond the current world order of economic competition (Ellis23). (copying the same words)
__ N___Ellis (2011) argues that global problems are often a result of exploitation inherent in
economic competition. He contends that “grassroots….people-to-people linkages irrespective of national borders” can do much to ease global tensions (p. 23). (explain with his own words)
___N__Economic competition is at the basis of many of the world’s problems (Ellis 23). Only by seeing ourselves as a single-family without the separation of national boundaries can world tensions begin to be eased.
___N__Ellis (2011) argues that world problems are caused by overpopulation and that the only possible solution is an enforced tax on families who have more than one child (p. 23). (The way he claims his statement and cite it is wrong)
Original Text:
Alaska’s wetlands provide many benefits including: food and habitat for wildlife, fish and
shellfish species, natural products for human use and subsistence, shoreline erosion and
sediment control, flood protection, and opportunities for recreation and esthetic appreciation.
Hall, Jonathan V., W. E. Frayer, and Bill O. Wilen.Status of Alaska Wetlands.4 Nov. 1997.Web. 12 Mar. 2011.
Student Version:
Alaskan wetlands offer advantages such as erosion and flood control, homes and food for
wildlife, and natural beauty and products for humans’ benefit. (no citation)
2.Original Text:
Assertive individuals tend to feel more in control of their lives, derive more satisfactions from
their relationships and achieve their goals more often. They also will obtain more respect from, and inspire confidence in, those with whom they interact since they tend to be viewed as strong characters who will not be easily swayed.
Hargie, O., Saunders, C., & Dickson, D. (2000).Social Skills in Interpersonal Communication.London: Routledge,p. 271.
Student Version:
Because they are not readily influenced, assertive people gain respect from others, and they
experience success in guiding their own lives, nurturing good relationships, and achieving
their goals (Hargie, Saunders, and Dickson, 2000, p. 271). (you can’t start a sentence with because and he uses the same words)
3.Original Text:
A new to recycle bald tires has been developed by researchers at the University of Georgia
Agricultural Experiment Station. Instead of hanging them on trees as swings, they’re using
them as mulch around the base.
“Tires Return as Mulch.”Popular Mechanics 94.2 (2000): 22. LEXIX-NEXIS. Web. 31 July 2011.
Student Version:
A Popular Mechanics article notes that University of Georgia researchers have found a new
use for worn tires: instead of having them on trees as swings, they’re using them as mulch
(“Tires Return”). (No citation)

11/6 Essay2 Feedback

The APA formatting is the point I need to improved. I have some problems with in-text citation and reference. I need to have a more obvious argument to connect two in-class articles and have some detailed examples to improve my argument.


10/30 Beidi / MJ / HUZAIFA

The video is talking about the New Iphone11. Most of the method that in the speech to illustrate the product is contrast. When the speaker uses gesture the screen just shows the contraction between the old iPhone and the new iPhone. Take the camera as an example: the speaker mentions an ultra-wide camera which is the new technological improvement in the new iPhone.  So the speaker uses statistic data to analysis the new camera advantages and uses seemly gesture during the time of the picture come up on the screen which makes the speech effective. The speaker uses effective communication to express how good the product is by making the tiniest features of the product look good which was impressive as it really persuades the audience to buy the product. The speaker has a strong pose so it makes him looks very confident and persuasive.


10/28 In Class Writing

After I read the response in Canvas, I found that Jayesh Patel’s idea is totally different from me. He summarizes the contents of the essay first, then point out his idea. The ideas he pointed out are more focus on the contents of the essay. He didn’t analyze the essay itself but the content which is totally different from me. I think online essays have more clear structure than a traditional essay, and it has more possibilities than traditional essays. The images can attract audience’s attention easier than the words. The structure of the online essay is more easy to read.

Interview Questions:

1、What is this major really about?

2、What kind of career can we get in after we graduate?




10/25 VerbTense Exercise

Activity 1
For a long time, my stepson, Jonathan, was unhappy to have me as part of his family, for
he resents that he didn’t have both biological parents at home. I have tried to get to know him
better, but he would complain that I invaded his privacy. As a newcomer, I understood that
our relationship will require effort from both of us. It is not enough that I was friendly.
Jonathan also has to want us to be friends, and I was not happy with the two of us being
strangers, but I can wait for him to feel more comfortable around me.
Activity 2
Anne Marie collects antique bottles and loves to turn them into works of art. She will buy
bottles if she liked them, but she prefers to find them in the ground. She will find bottles
everywhere, but she picks them selectively. However, she has the best luck at
construction sites on old farmland, where she spent most of her time. Often, bottles
appear on the surface after a good rain, but they disappear very soon. She will use
special tools for excavating bottles, including a set of brushes. She does not want to break
the bottles as she removes them from the ground. After finding a new bottle, Anne Marie
will add it to her display case and hung on the wall as an artistic piece (Mangelsdorf,
2013, p. 411).

10/23 Video Essay Outline

In Essay 3, I want to clarify the misunderstanding of the Design Major. Most people will think design major is about costume design, but that’s not true. The design has lots of different types and it’s not only about costume design. Design major in our university is mostly about graphic design. The career prospect of Design major is multifarious. The skills we learned in this major can work in so many different regions. I want to clarify the misunderstanding at first, then introduce what is this major.

Reference list

1、LIVINGSTON D. Graphic Design, the Communication of Social Issues and the Evolution of the Social Alternatives Design Framework over Forty Years. Social Alternatives. 2018;37(2):47-52. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=sso&db=sih&AN=131723196&site=eds-live&scope=site. Accessed October 23, 2019.

2、Lee C, Qadeer AS. Graphic Design. C: International Contemporary Art. 2019;(141):10-11. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=sso&db=asu&AN=135646551&site=eds-live&scope=site. Accessed October 23, 2019.

3、Gorski DE. Graphic Design and Instructional Methods: An Action Research Study. Journal of Technology Education. 2018;29(2):107-113. http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=sso&db=eric&AN=EJ1182374&site=eds-live&scope=site. Accessed October 23, 2019.


10/21 Video Essay

3 key features

  • The multimodal text included
  • Have coherent texts with topic sentences and supporting details in order to describe, narrate, report and inform.
  • Edit the multimodal text and reflect how they are different with written text.

3 main requirements

  • Analyze and use at least THREE sources to support your project
  • The video should be between 3-4 minutes to concisely communicate the main idea
  • The multimodal text should include editing