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Excerpt from page 23 of an article in 2011 by William Ellis entitled “Culture in Transition.”
World problems such as poverty, pollution, war, and hunger are inherent in the current system of world order based on nation-states and economic competition. They can be solved if people know and understand one another on a global, grass-roots basis. By developing people-to-people linkages irrespective of national borders, we can start to ameliorate global tensions and inequities.
___Y__William Ellis asserts that world problems such as poverty, pollution, war, and hunger are
inherent in the current system of world order based on nation-states and economic
competition (p. 23). (No quotation mark) 
___Y__Global tensions and inequities can be solved if people begin to help one another on a grass-roots basis, moving beyond the current world order of economic competition (Ellis23). (copying the same words)
__ N___Ellis (2011) argues that global problems are often a result of exploitation inherent in
economic competition. He contends that “grassroots….people-to-people linkages irrespective of national borders” can do much to ease global tensions (p. 23). (explain with his own words)
___N__Economic competition is at the basis of many of the world’s problems (Ellis 23). Only by seeing ourselves as a single-family without the separation of national boundaries can world tensions begin to be eased.
___N__Ellis (2011) argues that world problems are caused by overpopulation and that the only possible solution is an enforced tax on families who have more than one child (p. 23). (The way he claims his statement and cite it is wrong)
Original Text:
Alaska’s wetlands provide many benefits including: food and habitat for wildlife, fish and
shellfish species, natural products for human use and subsistence, shoreline erosion and
sediment control, flood protection, and opportunities for recreation and esthetic appreciation.
Hall, Jonathan V., W. E. Frayer, and Bill O. Wilen.Status of Alaska Wetlands.4 Nov. 1997.Web. 12 Mar. 2011.
Student Version:
Alaskan wetlands offer advantages such as erosion and flood control, homes and food for
wildlife, and natural beauty and products for humans’ benefit. (no citation)
2.Original Text:
Assertive individuals tend to feel more in control of their lives, derive more satisfactions from
their relationships and achieve their goals more often. They also will obtain more respect from, and inspire confidence in, those with whom they interact since they tend to be viewed as strong characters who will not be easily swayed.
Hargie, O., Saunders, C., & Dickson, D. (2000).Social Skills in Interpersonal Communication.London: Routledge,p. 271.
Student Version:
Because they are not readily influenced, assertive people gain respect from others, and they
experience success in guiding their own lives, nurturing good relationships, and achieving
their goals (Hargie, Saunders, and Dickson, 2000, p. 271). (you can’t start a sentence with because and he uses the same words)
3.Original Text:
A new to recycle bald tires has been developed by researchers at the University of Georgia
Agricultural Experiment Station. Instead of hanging them on trees as swings, they’re using
them as mulch around the base.
“Tires Return as Mulch.”Popular Mechanics 94.2 (2000): 22. LEXIX-NEXIS. Web. 31 July 2011.
Student Version:
A Popular Mechanics article notes that University of Georgia researchers have found a new
use for worn tires: instead of having them on trees as swings, they’re using them as mulch
(“Tires Return”). (No citation)

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