Group work on speech and individual reflection writing on the blog:

During our discussion in class, we shared our ideas and tentative outlines for the argumentative speech. In our group we had a grasp on the topics that we felt passionately about speaking on and helped each other narrow down our topics. In our discussion, I got very positive feedback about my topic of choice and the information that I had in my outline. I got advice to add more content and work on my conclusion. Looking at my partners speeches, I examined how they formatted theirs and gave them advice on where to put more emphasis and such. My topic applies to everyone living in the US, so it is very relevant. This was a tentative outline, so I need to add more sources to my speech.

Individual blog writing: Freewriting on argument speech

I have an idea for what I want my topic to be on! I think I might want to talk about the standards for food here in the USA compared to other countries. We have the most chemicals and unnecessary ingredients in our food that aren’t good for us. Other countries have laws in place that prevent their food from being as processed as ours. The solution to this problem is putting laws in place to ban all additives from food. For example, the red dye used in food, RED 4, is banned in many other countries. I think it is imperative to everybody’s heath and wellbeing. There’s not really another solution than to ban the additives because it will force companies to modify their products.

Individual writing on the blog:

She opens with a visual of her and her mother at their first house in the United States and connects with the audience instantly in this way. She gives her personal experience with the topic and it establishes both a sense of ethos and pathos with her audience. It also allows for her to add context for her topic and introduce it to the audience. She also has a very strong delivery, her tone is very unwavering, she maintained eye contact with the audience, and uses hand gestures very well. Her gestures and eye contact are very natural and add a lot to her delivery. Her use of visuals is also very strong, they are easy to comprehend because she keeps her slides simple with minimal text. Chang maintains a confident tone throughout her speech, adding emotion and humor throughout. I even noticed that she doesn’t even have speaker notes, just giving her speech entirely from memory and practice.

Sana, Carly, and Richie

Activity 1: For a long time, my stepson, Jonathan, was unhappy to have me as part of his family, for he resented that he didn’t have both biological parents at home. I tried to get to know him better, but he would complain that I invaded his privacy. As a newcomer, I understood that our relationship would require effort from both of us. It was not enough that I was friendly. Jonathan also wanted to be friends, and I was not happy with the two of us being strangers, but I could wait for him to feel more comfortable around me.

Activity 2: Anne Marie collects antique bottles and loves to turn them into works of art. She will buy bottles if she likes them, but she prefers to find them in the ground. She will find bottles everywhere, but she picks them selectively. However, she has the best luck at construction sites on old farmland, where she spends most of her time. Often, bottles appear on the surface after a good rain, but they disappear very soon. She will use special tools for excavating bottles, including a set of brushes. She does not want to break the bottles as she removes them from the ground. After finding a new bottle, Anne Marie will add it to her display case and hang it on the wall as an artistic piece (Mangelsdorf, 2013, p. 411).

 

Individual blog writing:

Watch this short video speech by Emma Gonzalez (from Week 14 Module: Tuesday Activities: Watch) and write a brief rhetorical analysis on your blog (in 2-3 paragraphs) by focusing on what makes this speech an effective and memorable voice for a social cause.

In Emma Gonzalez’s speech, she talks about the loss of her classmates at the Stonemason Douglas High School shooting at the March for Our Lives Rally. She opened with stating the time in which the shooting took place and the atrocities committed in those six minutes and twenty seconds. This repetition effectively opens up a dialogue about her personal experience with this tragedy and all of the strong emotion attached to it. Her tone made her message so powerful, she was very unwavering even when she was brought to tears. The amount of emotion that she uses in her speech is something that could not be ignored because it was so powerful.

After using personal details about those who passed away, she continues to use repetition to emphasize what was lost.

Kiran, Carly, Yujie, Lilah 

This photo was taken on May 3 2022, just a month prior to the overturning of Roe v. Wade. Many people took to the streets to protest the Supreme Court’s probable upcoming decision in an effort to prevent a decision which will majorly impact the lives of women across the country. The women in this photo are calling for their rights to be protected. Roe vs. Wade is meant to show the government that women’s bodies belong to themselves and the choice is ultimately theirs to make. In the photo we see many people are against the recent events that were taken against Roe vs. Wade and we can use the image to argue that people demand to have their reproductive rights federally protected. This belief also spans across many age groups and men and women. In the image they are calling for action to be taken and to uphold Roe vs. Wade and how it’s imperative to health care. 

 

The photo captured a group of women braving to protest the breach of their natural rights and bodily autonomy. Within this frame just two signs are legible: A sign with a coat hanger and the words “Never Again”; the other one with the words “Abortion is Healthcare”. The coat hanger highlights the irony of the decision being that prior to the legalization of abortion and the medicine needed women were forced to terminate unwanted and/or dangerous pregnancies using a coat hanger. The advancement of a safe medical abortion led to the making of abortion mandates and laws; eventually leading to the passing of Roe vs Wade. Since the 1980’s abortion laws have been progressing, giving those with uteruses more freedom and bodily autonomy. Until the 2022 overturning of the short standing yet impactful reign of Roe vs. Wade, taking the country back three decades in terms of bodily autonomy and medical rights. The overturning of Roe vs. Wade will allow conservative states to enforce their own mandates and laws on abortion, taking away reproductive choices and rights.

 

Blog writing in group: Lola, Vincent, Carly

Activity 1:

A minister walking down a country lane sees a young farmer struggling to load hay back onto a cart. “You look hot, my son,” said the minister. “Rest a moment and let me give you a hand.”

“No thanks,” said the young man. “My father wouldn’t like it.”

“I’m sure he wouldn’t mind,” the minister said. “Everyone is entitled to a break. Come and have a drink of water.” Again, the young man said that his father would be upset.

Losing his patience, the minister said, “Your father must be a real slave driver. I’d like to give him a piece of my mind. Tell me where I can find him!”

“Well,” replied the young farmer, “look down. He’s under the load of hay.”

Activity 2:

Please read the following passage carefully and improve the sentences by changing their verb tenses and appropriate subordinating conjunctions (joining words, such as who, whose, which, that, whereas, because, etc.). Also, remember FANBOYS to help you use correct punctuation. Please highlight the changes you make to these sentences. If you need further help, please review the examples and explanations here: https://open.lib.umn.edu/writingforsuccess/chapter/7-2-coordination-and-subordination/

A wise old gentleman retired and bought a home near a Middle School and mostly spent his summers in his cottage. However, when the school year began his peace and quiet came to a sudden halt.

On the first day of school three boys came down the alley beating merrily on every trash can they saw. The same thing happened the next day and the next, and the noise started driving the wise old man crazy. The old man decided it was time for action.

The next afternoon he stops the drummers as they banged their way down the street. He says, “You kids are a lot of fun! I love hearing your drumming, because it is so cheerful, and it reminds me of what I used to do at your age. Will you do me a favor?”

The boys looked at him suspiciously. “What?” they ask. “I’ll give you a dollar if you promise to come around every single day and keep beating on those trash cans,” said the man.

The boys were thrilled. Everyday they pounded on trash cans and collected a dollar.

After about a week, the wise old man stopped the boys again and this time he looked a little bit sad, “I still love your drumming,” he said to the boys. “However I’m afraid spending a dollar a day is hard on me, I’m on a fixed income. From now on, I’m only going to be able to pay you 50 cents to beat on the cans.”

The boys weren’t too happy, but they decided to accept 50 cents a day, and they continued beating on all the trash cans. After another week, the clever old man stopped the boys again, “I’ve got more bad news,” he said, “My Social Security check hasn’t come yet, so I’m not going to be able to give you more than 25 cents a day. Is that all right?”

“Are you kidding?” said one of the boys,“We’re not going to waste our time beating on those trash cans for only a lousy quarter! We quit!”

The wise old man smiled and enjoyed his peace and quiet.

 

Carly, Richie, Megha, and Yujie

White rhinos are famous for their big horns, they are among the endangered species.

White rhinos are famous for their big horns; they are among the endangered species.

The teacher didn’t know if she should laugh or cry; but she knew it was quite hilarious.

The teacher didn’t know if she should laugh or cry, but she knew it was quite hilarious.

Three things matter in life; perseverance, commitment, and aptitude for learning.

Three things matter in life: perseverance, commitment, and aptitude for learning.

A dog trotted over to the computer in Sara’s office; typed out a perfect letter; and printed it!

A dog trotted over to the computer in Sara’s office, typed out a perfect letter, and printed it!

The manager was stunned; but she told the dog; “The sign says you have to be good with the computer, just because you’re good at typing doesn’t mean that you are good with it”.

The manager was stunned, but she told the dog; “The sign says you have to be good with the computer, just because you’re good at typing doesn’t mean that you are good with it”.

A man walked into a pet shop and ordered three things, centipede, kitten, parrot.

A man walked into a pet shop and ordered three things: a centipede, kitten, and parrot.

Sama was the best person for the job, because she had an excellent service record in one key area; community health training.

Sama was the best person for the job because she had an excellent service record in one key area; community health training.

Amy served with 4 stars in the army, therefore, she was awarded the Medal of Honor.

Amy served with 4 stars in the army; therefore, she was awarded the Medal of Honor.

Sammi, Carly, and Zijie

Exercise 1 : 

1. Pets are not allowed in Mr. Taylor’s building, although he owns several cats and a parrot.
2. New legislation prevents drivers from sending or reading text messages while driving; however, many people continue to use their phones illegally.
3. By the time his relatives found him, nothing could be done as the coroner concluded that the young man had taken a lethal concoction of drugs.
4. Amphibians are vertebrates that live on land and in the water, whereas flatworms are invertebrates that live only in water.
5. Ashley carefully fed and watered her tomato plants all summer, resulting in the tomatoes growing juicy and ripe.
6. Simon attempted to open the door with a wire hanger, a credit card, and a paperclip, but when unsuccessful, he called the manufacturer for advice.

Exercise 2: 

1. Since there are beautiful beaches in Mexico, Jake is going. 
2. As a result of the snowstorm that disrupted traffic all over the east coast, there will be long delivery delays this week.
3. I banged on my neighbor’s door and asked him to keep the noise down because he had his television volume turned up too high.
4. After Jessica prepared the potato salad and the sautéed vegetables, Ashley marinated the chicken.
5. After Romeo poisons himself and Juliet awakes to find Romeo dead, she stabs herself with a dagger.

This cartoon shows and argues the issues of class inequality. The older men in the picture are all upper class “old money” men who don’t see the issue of class inequality. The strengths of this argument include the clothes these people are wearing as well was what they say. They are all wearing badges with “1%” on them, blatantly symbolizing that they are part of the top 1% and their words are asserting that they also think less of the lower class and joke about the inequality of the lower classes. This meme overall alludes to the selfishness of those who have not seen financial struggle and refuse to acknowledge it as well as deem those in other financial situations to be lazy or not as hardworking as them.

 

 

Free writing:

For my essay three, I think I would like to write about gentrification of my hometown of Carlsbad, CA. Carlsbad used to be a predominately Mexican beach town in Southern California when my parents were growing up and even when I was little. My mother moved into the government apartments after she immigrated and my dad grew up in a house in an area called the “barrio”. Barrios are defined as Spanish- speaking areas of towns that typically have a high poverty level. It used to be an area where you didn’t see white people walking around by themselves too often. Now white people have flooded the area after they mustered up the money and “vision” to “rebuild” Carlsbad and they bought up all the real estate. Many of the Mexicans in the barrio got bought out and only a few of the original owners remain. The barrio is now seen as valuable fixer- upper beach properties to all of the white people who once were not seen in that area ever. Carlsbad has now been transformed into a predominately white and ultra wealthy beach town. A lot of local businesses couldn’t compete with the chains and bigger restaurants that came with the gentrification. My grandma has still maintained the property that her Father bought and built from nothing and we intend to keep it that way.

Group members : Lintao Xue, Carly, Megha 

 

Is this plagiarism or not?

1. Directions: Read the following scenarios and decide whether it is a case of plagiarism or

not. (Y or N) and explain why.

 

__Y___ 1. Kyoko needs to write a report on American politics. She looks up Barack Obama in

Wikipedia and discovers he is the 44th president of the United States. She includes this

information in her report but doesn’t mention Wikipedia.

•  Yes because she doesn’t mention the source.

 

___Y__2. Tam is writing a paper on a novel for his English class. Since the whole class is reading

the same book, he doesn’t need to use a citation.

• Yes, In formal writing you have to cite your sources. 

 

__N___3. Sugi wrote a paper for his European history class last semester and got an A on the

paper. This semester, his Political Science class is addressing some of the same issues that are in

his History paper. He checks with his professor first who agrees with Sugi, so he uses the

material from his History paper.

 

• No, the professor has allowed him to use the material. 

 

___Y__4. Ramiro, Stephan, April, and Chris are working on a group project. Chris submits his

work and the others suspect that some of it came from the Internet, but it sounds good, so they

submit it.

• Yes, Because Chris used information from the internet without proper citations.

 

___N__5. Maria finds a lot of good information for her paper on the Internet. She carefully

changes the wording and prepares a good paraphrase. She doesn’t copy anything verbatim.

• No, Because Maria changed the wording and prepared a good paraphrase.

 

1. Directions: Decide whether the information described in each scenario will require

citation of the source (Y or N) and explain why.

 

__N___1. You clearly identify the source at the beginning of a paragraph that summarizes the

author’s ideas about teenage drinking. Since readers will naturally assume all of the ideas in

the paragraph are from the source, no additional citation is necessary.

• If the source is clearly identified in the beginning, no other citation is necessary. 

____N_2. In your paper on the history of aviation you state the date of the Wright brothers’ first

successful flight at Kitty Hawk.

The date falls under common knowledge and cited by multiple sources. 

___N__3. In a paper on the civil rights movement you find some general, well-known background

information in an encyclopedia. It is obviously common knowledge, so you copy the

information and include it in your paper.

• No, because this is common knowledge.

___N__4. You ask your mother about the steps she went through in obtaining a bank loan for a

new car. You include this information in your paper.

• No, because this information was obtained from family members.

_____5. You skim a 325-page book entitled Using the Internet. A major theme throughout the

book is that the Internet is an important technological achievement. You include this in your

Paper.

• No, you’re allowed to have the same opinions as others. 

_____6. You find an article that takes the same position you have taken on the subject of gun

control. To save time you summarize in your paper a portion of the argument from the article,

since the author’s ideas are identical to your own.

• Kind of, depends on how you state your position and word it. 

(Excerpts above are from the following text: Clines, R.H & Cobb, E. R. (2012) Research Writing

Simplified, 7th Edition. Upper Saddle River, NJ: Pearson.

 

Taryn Coe is a white teacher at a predominately white high school. She aims to teach anti- racism as an English teacher through focusing on books with protagonists of color who are written by people of color. She teaches anti- racism in an effort to guide white students into recognizing their privilege and how they benefit from society and how people of color do not have that same privilege.

In relation to Carmen Kynard’s essay, Coe explores how white people can educate themselves instead of looking towards any person of color to educate them instead. Kynard explores her experience with hush harbor’s as a black female student and Coe’s ideas compliment Kynard’s experiences. Kynard and others in her group felt that they could not express themselves or feel valid in academic spaces. Coe expresses how people of color shouldn’t have to explain racism and everything that goes with it to white people. Coe brings forward the point that white students and staff shouldn’t look towards their colored counterparts to be the solution, and that the solution can also start with themselves. Both of these author’s ideas go hand in hand because the other’s ideas help to explain the actions of one another.

Sana, Battulga, Carl

1. Many local farmers plan to attend next Friday’s meeting.

Many local farmers are attending next Friday’s meeting. 

1. Although Bradley Hall is regularly populated by students, close study of the building as a structure is seldom undertaken by them.

Bradley Hall is regularly populated, but close studies of the building as a structure are seldom done by students. 

1. He dropped out of school on account of the fact that it was necessary for him to help support his family.

Out of necessity for supporting his family, he dropped out of school. 

1. It is expected that the new schedule will be announced by the bus company within the next few days.

The new bus schedule will be announced by the company in the next few days.

1. 1. There are many ways in which a student who is interested in meeting foreign students may come to know one.

• Students who want to meet foreign students can do so in many different ways. 

1. 1. It is very unusual to find someone who has never told a deliberate lie on purpose.

• It’s very unusual to find someone who’s never told a deliberate lie. 

1. 1. Trouble is caused when people disobey rules that have been established for the safety of all.

• Breaking the law causes trouble. 

1. 1. A campus rally was attended by more than a thousand students. Five students were arrested by campus police for disorderly conduct, while several others are charged by campus administrators with organizing a public meeting without being issued a permit to do so.

• Five students were arrested during a campus rally for disorderly conduct. Several others were charged for organizing a public meeting without a permit. 

1. The subjects that are considered most important by students are those that have been shown to be useful to them after graduation.

1. The most important subjects are those have been shown to be useful to them after graduation

1. In the not too distant future, college freshmen must all become aware of the fact that there is a need for them to make contact with an academic adviser concerning the matter of a major.

1. In the near future, freshmen must contact an academic adviser about their major.

1. In our company there are wide-open opportunities for professional growth with a company that enjoys an enviable record for stability in the dynamic atmosphere of aerospace technology.

1. Our company offers opportunities for professional growth and enjoys a stable record in the aerospace technology industry

1. Some people believe in capital punishment, while other people are against it; there are many opinions on this subject.

1. Some support, while others oppose capital punishment, and there are many opinions on this subject.