MonthNovember 2019

November 25: Speech Evaluation

This speech analysis is on Winston Churchill’s “Their Finest Hour” speech.

  • The attention -getting opener for this speech is as follows:

“I spoke the other day of the colossal military disaster which occurred when the French High Command failed to withdraw the northern Armies from Belgium at the moment when they knew that the French front was decisively broken at Sedan and on the Meuse.” This opening statement addresses that he is aware of the allying country, France, situation. Letting the people know that he is in the know gives the population ease of mind that their leader knows whats going on.

  • Introduction:

He introduces the realization of Great Britain being alone in Europe after the fall of France and Belgium.

“We may now ask ourselves: In what way has our position worsened since the beginning of the war? It has worsened by the fact that the Germans have conquered a large part of the coastline of Western Europe.” This is the thesis statement of the speech

  • A body Preview:

“We have, therefore, in this island today a very large and powerful military force.” This statement is providing logos in his speech by offering a idea of security in the nation.

“Much will depend on this; every man and every woman will have their chance to show the finest qualities of their race, and render the highest service to their cause.” This is the speeches pathos as it add in their emotions of the people helping in time of need.

The main points of the speech are consisted of talking about how prepared the country is for invasion, asking the people to help where they can and to stay calm, and to be in the know of whats happening in Europe as the conflict closes in.

In conclusion:

This speech was use to help persuade the population of Great Britain and eventually defeat the Germans. Using his ethos position and logos persuasion to help the nation bunker down was effective in preparing the population for invasion.

November 22: Liberal Arts / Example Speech

I have no clue what this is bro! The best I can come up with is that it is a problem solving area in majors. The term it self is an area of college studies based around general knowledge that prepares you for anything. The benefits, based off the definition is well you can get any job. It is also said that liberal arts will help you gain a stronger will of social responsibility. Skills such as communication, analysis, and problem-solving are among the transferable skills offered.

Example Speech:

I am choosing Winston Churchill’s “Finest Hour” Speech as my example. The main point of the speech is to address the people of Britain that an attack is coming the the nation directly.  He asks that all citizens bunker down and prepare for the battle of London. He asks that everyone stay strong because this battle could decide the war very early on. As he put it, “But if we fail, then the whole world, including the United States, including all that we have known and cared for, will sink into the abyss of a new Dark Age made more sinister, and perhaps more protracted, by the lights of perverted science.” I feel that the most important aspects of giving a speech in this manor would be the tone and volume. You want to make sure everyone feels the emotions of the speech. You also want everybody to hear you in general, especially if your talking to a nation.

References:

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November 20: Argument Speech / Fusion Research

WE NEED AIR CONDITIONING!

I want my topic to be about a proposal to improve safety conditions in a particular building or facility. As a student I have found myself sweating profusely after walking up the extensive Lone Mountain steps. When I come inside I feel nothing but the same sweat that I came in with. I realized that there is no air conditioning with in the building what so ever. This to me is a huge safety concern with the increase of high temperatures in the bay area. Buildings like the Gleeson library, which become hotboxes in the summer, require extensive air conditioning. The lives of the USFCA students depend on a proper air conditioning system.

Some of the topics that I will be hitting:

  • Gleeson library becoming a greenhouse
  • Lone mountain and the Education Building not providing adequate air conditioning
  • In the dorms most importantly
  • The benefits of gaining an air conditioning system
  • The cost of implementing an air conditioning system

 

Fusion:

The article is presented on a website that is directed towards engineers and HVAC people alike. The article presents a list of reason why we need AC in every building. The second reason outlines exactly what I was thinking in my argument. “Thus the human beings generate lots of heat inside the room and which leads to increase in temperature inside the room and creation of uncomfortable conditions. As the number of human beings inside the room increase, the total heat generated by the human beings also increases.” (Khemani, para. 2) The quote presented talks about how energy within the body builds up heat once its out. Along with the energy from one person being used up and released, when in a class room of 40 people it becomes extremely overheated. This should be a great enough reason to implement air conditioning.

References:

Web site used: 

November 18: Subject Verb

It was January 17, 2005 and three cadets were training to become police detectives. The sergeant decided to test their (they were *removed) skill at recognizing a suspect. He showed the first cadet a picture for five seconds and then hides it. Then he says, “That was your suspect, how would you recognize him?” “That’s easy, answered the cadet. “We would find him quickly because he only has one eye. The sergeant thought for a minute and then answered, “Well that’s because the picture I showed you is a profile. It shows only a side view.” He can’t believe (removed the d) the cadet had given him such a ridiculous answer, but he goes on to the second cadet. Flashing the picture for five seconds to him. Again, he asks, “That was your suspect, how would you recognize him?” The second cadet smiled and says, “He would be easy to catch, because he has only one ear!” The police sergeant shakes his head in disbelief. Then angrily responded, “What’s the matter with you two? Of course, there is only one eye and one ear are showing, it’s a picture of his profile! Is that the best answer you can come up with?!” Extremely frustrated at this point, he shows the picture to the 3rd cadet and in a very testy voice asked, “This is your suspect. How would you recognize him?” He quickly adds, “Think hard before giving me a stupid answer.” The cadet looks at the picture intently for a moment. Then she said, “The suspect wears contact lenses.” The sergeant is speechless. He goes to his office checked the suspects file in his computer and comes back. He is beaming. “Its true! The suspect does indeed wear contact lenses. Tell us how you were able to make such an astute observation! “It was easy,” said the cadet. “He can’t wear glasses because he only has one eye and one ear.”
Discussion reflection:
So I chose Angill’s response to reflect on, I read a lot of similarities between our interpretations. We both strongly agreed on the importance of the author pointing out the aspects of isolation and loneliness. While reading the story I got a firm understanding about what it feels like to be torn between two separate cultures in one family, which brings in the second thing. We both agreed that a contrast in culture for someone can cause overwhelming reactions to culture itself. When you have to constantly make a choice or jump back and forth between cultures, it makes wanting to participate in them none existent. Finally, we both agreed on the Identity confusion associated with multi-cultural people. It’s hard to identify yourself when you have multiple cultures and backgrounds weighing in on you. We definitely have different experiences with multi-cultural, I have little to none, while she has history and culture to hang onto.

November 15: Historical Event

I am from the great state of Mississippi, an area within the region of the designated southern part of the US. The biggest thing that I’ve seen talked about when it comes to Mississippi or the South in general, is racism. Since coming here, to San Francisco, I have been titled as a racist or referred to when talking about racism because of where I am from. Thinking upon this entitlement that I have, I feel the biggest reason is contributed to the American Civil War. Many people have their own opinion on why we fought the war, the most popular is the South wanted to hold on to their slaves. After losing the war, the South was instantly referred to as the racist region of America. Elaborating a little more on this topic, I want to talk about the past reasons for our entitlement and the present challenges that ensue.

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The Civil War offered the country as a whole a great many challenges, to rethink their stance on slaves, to progressively allow blacks to assimilate into a normal life, and to move on with a look of shame. The very reason of fighting the war and the response that the South gave to freedom in terms of slaves has haunted us to this very day. We are constantly reminded everyday of the “South will rise again” or “White Supremacy”. “I grew up white supremacist,” he admits. “We thought we were better than black people.” (Lead, Para. 18) While I do admit there are areas in the south who truly believe in this, I feel that it is such due to social pressure of being reminded of who we were.

https://www.theguardian.com/global/2018/oct/08/the-white-southerners-who-changed-their-views-on-racism

November 8: Marginal comments / Favorite person, again

The first two pieces of feedback offer insight on how to properly conduct an in-text citation with an example reference given. The other piece of feedback is about how to structure a proper thesis with the article. I feel like I can use these two pieces to improve further articles of mine. The following piece of feedback is about implementing good transitions and sectioning off my larger paragraphs into smaller ones. This will definitely allow me to give my essay a better flow instead of huge chunks of information. The next three are really goods ones about introducing certain people in a certain way. It also involves some positive feedback about how I used outside research in my essay. I think this is very good feedback in terms of progressing my essay into a proper structure. Overall my essay needs a better structure and organization.

 

Robert Downey Jr

I did Robert Downey Jr.’s twitter account. RDJ is obviously known for the huge role of playing Iron man in the MCU. He is constantly posting about it regardless of his characters demise with the last installment of the MCU. His character seems to portray that of Tony Stark; I think that over the ten years of playing him he has transformed into a real life Tony Stark. He uploads photo’s and video’s and announcements about Iron man and Marvel. He also does stage talking here and there, inspiring the minds of the young. The ethos that I see with RDJ is very correspondent with a fictional character than his own. People truly don’t see him in any other fashion than that of who he has played and more importantly he is Iron man.

RDJ Twitter:  https://twitter.com/robertdowneyjr?lang=en

November 6: Plagiarism Pt.2 & Advertisement (Aboye, Chris, Bolun)

Is this plagiarism or not?
Directions: You will find a series of student produced texts based on sources. Read the original and then read the student text and decide whether the student has plagiarized. If so, how would you correct the problem? In the process of correcting, follow APA style to demonstrate what the in-text citation should be like and create a References list for them.
(Excerpts below are from the following text: Clines, R.H & Cobb, E. R. (2012)Research Writing Simplified, 7th Edition. Upper Saddle River, NJ: Pearson.)
1. Excerpt from page 23 of an article in 2011 by William Ellis entitled “Culture in Transition.” World problems such as poverty, pollution, war, and hunger are inherent in the current system of world order based on nation-states and economic competition. They can be solved if people know and understand one another on a global, grass-roots basis. By developing people-to-people linkages irrespective of national borders, we can start to ameliorate global tensions and inequities.
Student versions:
Is this plagiarism or not? Y or N
Y. William Ellis asserts that world problems such as poverty, pollution, war, and hunger are inherent in the current system of world order based on nation-states and economic competition (p. 23).
-The support is cited word for word with an incorrect citation given.
N. Global tensions and inequities can be solved if people begin to help one another on a grass-roots basis, moving beyond the current world order of economic competition (Ellis 23).
-Correct citation on a paraphrase.
Y. Ellis (2011) argues that global problems are often a result of exploitation inherent in economic competition. He contends that “grass roots….people-to people linkages irrespective of national borders” can do much to ease global tensions (p. 23).
-This is correctly supported, but has an incorrect citation.
Y. Economic competition is at the basis of many of the world’s problems (Ellis 23). Only by seeing ourselves as a single family without the separation of national boundaries can world tensions begin to be eased.
-Correct paraphrase and citation, but the citation is in the wrong place.
Y. Ellis (2011) argues that world problems are caused by overpopulation and that the only possible solution is an enforced tax on families who have more than one child (p. 23).
-Made up information by the author.
Original Text:
Alaska’s wetlands provide many benefits including: food and habitat for wildlife, fish and shellfish species, natural products for human use and subsistence, shoreline erosion and sediment control, flood protection, and opportunities for recreation and esthetic appreciation.
Hall, Jonathan V., W. E. Frayer, and Bill O. Wilen. Status of Alaska Wetlands. 4 Nov. 1997. Web. 12 Mar. 2011.
Student Version:
Alaskan wetlands offer advantages such as erosion and flood control, homes and food for wildlife, and natural beauty and products for humans’ benefit.
-Plagiarism, there is no citation anywhere to give credit to text.
2.Original Text:
Assertive individuals tend to feel more in control of their lives, derive more satisfactions from their relationships and achieve their goals more often. They also will obtain more respect from, and inspire confidence in, those with whom they interact since they tend to be viewed as strong characters who will not be easily swayed. Hargie, O., Saunders, C., & Dickson, D. (2000). Social Skills in Interpersonal Communication. London: Routledge, p. 271.
Student Version:
Because they are not readily influenced, assertive people gain respect from others, and they experience success in guiding their own lives, nurturing good relationships, and achieving their goals (Hargie, Saunders, and Dickson, 2000, p. 271).
-Not plagiarism!
3.Original Text:
A new to recycle bald tires has been developed by researchers at the University of Georgia Agricultural Experiment Station. Instead of hanging them on trees as swings, they’re using them as mulch around the base. “Tires Return as Mulch.” Popular Mechanics 94.2 (2000): 22. LEXIX-NEXIS. Web. 31 July 2011.
Student Version:
A Popular Mechanics article notes that University of Georgia researchers have found a new use for worn tires: instead of having them on trees as swings, they’re using them as mulch (“Tires Return”).
-Plagiarism, Incorrect citation, missing parts.
Advertisement Analysis:
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-The advertisement is suggesting that over 20,000 physicians recommend smoking this certain brand of cigarettes as it is “less irritating”. The argument is that “Luckies” the least irritating type of cigarettes on the market.
-This claim is support by a visual of a physician offering a cigarette from a pack of the brand “Luckies”. They also offer credibility by letting the observer know that the given number is certified by trusted accountants.
It is finalized with the company’s slogan and statement at the end and bottom.

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