Oct 19: group work

Group: Sahara, Emily, and Sabrina

PRACTICE Please review the following sentences for errors in parallel structure. Correct the sentences by rewriting them. Not all sentences are incorrect. Answers may vary.

1. My dog is not only friendly but also playful.  My dog is friendly and playful.

2. We can go to the park or dancing in the classroom. We can go to the park or dance in the classroom. 

3. Jeremy likes to read historical, realistically and speculative fiction. Jeremy likes to read historical, realistic, and speculative fiction.

4. When I went to the bar, I want to dance, drinking and punch on the rowdy faces. When I go to the bar I want to dance, drink, and punch the rowdy faces.

5. Buying a car is not a decision to take lightly nor be careless about. correct

6. Tyler is for the legalization, not criminalization of marijuana. Tyler is for the legalization, not the criminalization of marijuana.

7. Sally needs a new stove, dishwasher and knives for her kitchen. Sally needs a new stove, dishwasher, and knives for her kitchen.  

8. My first grade teacher taught me how to write, how to read and play tic-tac-toe. My first grade teacher taught me how to write, read, and play tic-tac-toe.

9. She will not admit it, nor will she be apologizing. She will not admit it, nor will she apologize.

10. The whole wheat pasta is better than enriched wheat pasta. Correct  

11. Literature classes teach students to analyze texts, thinking critically, and improve writing. Literature classes teach students to analyze texts, think critically, and improve writing.

12. Beets are just as nutrient rich as rutabagas even though they are not in season. Beets are just as nutritious as rutabagas even though they are not in season.

13. Drunk drivers are thoughtlessly taking the lives of other people in their own hands,risk their own lives, thinking only about their own pleasure and fun, and not consider the consequences of their actions. Drunk drivers are thoughtlessly taking the lives of other people in their own hands, risking their own lives, thinking only about their own pleasure and fun, and not considering the consequences of their actions. 

14. In order to convey the information correctly, the police officer spoke loudly to the crowd, tellpeople where they should stand, repeated the information to help people remember, and gesture

In order to convey the information correctly, the police officer spoke loudly to the crowd, told people where to stand, repeated the information to help people remember, and gestured.

Oct 19 in class writing

For today’s peer review, I read Sahara’s post. What I found interesting about her discussion post, was how similar her’s was to mine. We both put examples of appealing to emotion. Sahara did this by talking about visual rhetoric and how visual images have more of a persuasive effect on the audience. Sahara thought that this was the case because images tend to be more stimulating to the brain than written texts. A difference that Sahara and I both have is that she uses examples that provide in text reference whereas I provide examples from the text that show what something means. Although Sahara and I provided examples differently, I think that I may try portraying examples as Sahara did.

group: Sahara and Valyntina

in class activity oct 14

To practice reading rhetorically and critically I took a look at The University of San Francisco’s Instagram page. Based off of the appearance of the account, viewers are able to notice how the university’s colors are green and yellow. The colors make the account appear to look friendly and creative. This represents the school well because most of the people at USF are friendly and creative. Another thing that stands out to me is how there is a lot of emphasis on this year’s upcoming election. By this, you can tell that the USF community is very involved in the community. Another important aspect of the account is how the city of San Francisco is demonstrated to appear. The city looks beautiful and upcoming in the pictures, and I think that the account does an appropriate job representing the city of San Francisco as well.

When looking at the account, it is clear that the university has a decent sized audience that it is portraying information too. With almost 25,000 followers on Instagram, USF must hold a lot of pressure to represent the school and city as a great place to be. The account portrays to ethos by posting pictures of famous alumni that have attended USF, and impressive tasks that the university is completing. An example of the material that has been posted recently that relates to ethos are the new dorms being built on campus, and the USF law school alum, Martin Jenkins who attended the USF school of law. Overall, I think that USF’s Instagram page is doing a good job representing the school community.

sept 30 in class activity

bryanna, emily, lillah

Discuss whether the following statements are examples of hard evidence or constructed arguments. Not all cases are clear-cut.

  1. Drunk drivers are involved in more than 50 percent of traffic deaths. hard evidence because a fact is presented 
  2. DNA tests of skin found under the victim’s fingernails suggest that the defendant was responsible for the assault. constructed arguments; there is no facts
  3. A psychologist testified that teenage violence could not be blamed on video games. CA; this is not a fact
  4. The crowds at President Trump’s inauguration were the largest on record. HE; this can be proven with facts
  5. “The only thing we have to fear is fear itself.” CA; this can be disproved 
  6. Air bags ought to be removed from vehicles because they can kill young children and small-framed adults. CA; this is an opinion

(Based on the activities in Lunsford, p. 63)

Sept 30 Essay 2 free writing

I started my essay based off of plastic straws. I found an argumentative article from the University of Arizona. I decided to use this because I was given a paper straw when I went to the Mcdonald’s drive-through and I did not agree with it. I care about the environment as well though so I do not want to bring back plastic straws entirely like my argument wants to. I think I am going to agree with my argument that other forms of straws are not it, but I may suggest that we should find an alternative to plastic straws other than the ones we have now. I am nervous about completing my essay because I have a lot of assignments in my other classes. Although, I know that I will be able to get it done because I always do.

For my essay, I have already started the introduction. I am following the format of the rhetorical analysis in our class textbook, so I think that I will be able to complete my assignment efficiently.

essay 2 outline:

intro: I will begin by connecting my personal experience of Mcdonalds to the article that is in favor of plastic straws i can say how I like plastic straws and agree with the article

body paragraphs

  1. ethos
  2. pathos
  3. logos
  4. maybe choose the opposing side
  5. then explain why the opposing side is wrong
  6. conclusion

I think that this light format will be easy to follow I am just worried that I will not be able to make it long enough.

Sept 28 in class activity

Emily, Henry

Combine each sentence pair into a single sentence using either a coordinating conjunction or a conjunctive adverb. Then copy the combined sentence onto your own sheet of paper.

  1. Pets are not allowed in Mr. Taylor’s building, but he owns several cats and a parrot.
  2. New legislation prevents drivers from sending or reading text messages while driving, yet many people continue to use their phones illegally.
  3. The coroner concluded that the young man had taken a lethal concoction of drugs, so by the time his relatives found him, nothing could be done.
  4. Amphibians are vertebrates that live on land and in the water, while flatworms are invertebrates that live only in water.
  5. Ashley carefully fed and watered her tomato plants all summer, so the tomatoes grew juicy and ripe.
  6. When he lost his car key, Simon attempted to open the door with a wire hanger, a credit card, and a paper clip, then called the manufacturer for advice.

Combine each sentence pair into a single sentence using a subordinating conjunction and then copy the combined sentence onto your own sheet of paper.

  1. Jake is going to Mexico, since there are beautiful beaches in Mexico.
  2. A snowstorm disrupted traffic all over the east coast, now there will be long delivery delays this week.
  3. My neighbor had his television volume turned up too high, so I banged on his door and asked him to keep the noise down.
  4. Jessica prepared the potato salad and the sautéed vegetables, while Ashley marinated the chicken.
  5. Romeo poisons himself, so Juliet awakes to find Romeo dead and stabs herself with a dagger.

Sept 23 APA quote sandwhich

The roots of research in (pollitical persusassion): Ethos, Pathos, and Logos and the Yale studies of Persuasive communications.

The text, “The roots of research in (pollitical persusassion): Ethos, Pathos, and Logos and the Yale studies of Persuasive communications” is published by Uludağ Üniversitesi Yayınları, (2010). The main idea of the article is to give background on the topics of ethos, pathos, and logos primarily focusing on the topic of political persusassion. As the article states, “The major contribution of Hovland and his colleagues has been the specification of an initial set of characteristics to understand the principles and processes of persuasion” (Uludağ Üniversitesi Yayınları, 3). This has been studied by the yale research group. The reason why studying ethos, pathos, and logos is important, is because it helps in the field of persuasive communications. Although in this case, it is most helpful when dealing with political persuassion.

In class writing 9/21/20 Jamye, Lillah, Emily

The cartoon “The biggest crowds: Political Cartoons” published by The Editorial Board appeals to the audience in a very interesting way. Right off the bat, you see Donald Trump in front of a bunch of people. Trump is saying, “I get the biggest crowds! Believe me!” What is ironic about this statement is that the crowd is not there in support of him; they are bashing on him. When giving a rhetorical analysis of the image, it is easy to notice how Trump is standing away from the people instead of towards them. This is an indirect message to the audience that he is putting his own best interest before the voices of the people in the crowd. It is also an ironic take away how he is also pictured to be very orange, while the crowd is black and white. This could emphasize he is in his own world and the people are in another. Overall, the cartoon does a good job portraying what is occurring in society in the present.


In class activity 9/16/20 Emily and Katie

-Blog writing in groups: 

Please read the following passages carefully and correct sentence fragment and run-on sentence mistakes; also, notice if there are other spelling and word choice issues.

Passage 1:

A man from the city came to visit a small farm. He saw a farmer feeding pigs in a very strange way. The farmer would lift a pig up to a nearby apple tree, and the pig would eat the apples directly off the tree. The farmer would move the pig from one apple to another until the pig was full; then he would start again with another pig.

The man from the city was pretty puzzled, so he watched for quite a while. He finally said, “What a strange way to feed pigs! It’s a waste of time! You could save a whole lot of time if you just shook the apples off the tree and let the pigs eat them from the ground!” The farmer looked puzzled and replied, “What’s time to a pig?”

Passage 2:

A young man waiting in line at the bank developed a loud case of hiccups got worse and worse. By the time he got to the teller’s window, he couldn’t hardly talk, yet he handed the teller his check to cash.

The teller tapping numbers into the computer looked up frowning. She said, “I can’t cash your check.”

The man was shocked, so he asked, “Why not?”

“The computer indicates you do not have sufficient funds to cover this amount,” she said. “In fact, our records show that your account is overdrawn by more than $5000.00.”

“It can’t be!” cried the man. “You’ve got to be kidding!”

“Your right, I am.” She smiled and she started counting out his cash. “You’ll notice that your hiccups are gone, though!”

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