Author: jkaquinokamalii

topic: only native Hawaiians should be able to vote for OHA

• what is OHA?
• the history of the voting process
• Why only hawaiians should vote?
• the benefits are who is affected

intriguing issues about racial discrimination and compassion. What do you see as similar or different from your own response? What do you learn from this response?

-My partner for this blog was Amani.

– “We know you don’t have a daddy” (p.66).

-That one experience made him have to deal with inner confidence issues, and he wasn’t able to be confident in himself or the atmosphere around him until he was much older

-Unfortunately, Gregory lived a life full of shame but I am glad he did eventually moving on from that shame and not let it affect him.

• Our differences throughout both of our blogs was that was that she decided to focus her writing on the main characters lack of a fatherly figure, while I focused on the issues on what he wanted to do in the future for the benefit of himself. Also, I decided to write more about how this story depicts his shame but its very ironic because he should not be shameful of things he canʻt control.
• Our similarities is that focused on his experiences as a child who did not deserve to be racial discriminated against because of his skin color.

Captain Cook arrived into the Hawaiian islands and spread diseases to Hawaiians. He brought over sexually transmitted diseases like syphilis and gonorrhea. Because of their island location, Native Hawaiians lacked immunity to infectious diseases like these, and they spread quickly. So did a “plague” that struck the island around 1803.

The overthrow of the Hawaiian Kingdom on January 17, 1893. Led by white Businessmen who jailed Queen Liliʻuokalani in her own palace. She surrendered because she did not want her bloodshed on her people. The marines came and over throw our land. There is no treaty conforming that Hawaiians had WILLING agreed to transition into a territory of the United States.

In the past, at least 98% of Hawaiians were literate in reading, writing, and speaking ʻōlelo Hawaiʻi, when their language was not written. It was passed down orally through generations. After the occupation of the Hawaiian Kingdom, the Hawaiian language was removed from all homes and schools. My high school, Kamehameha which only accepts Hawaiians, were unable to speak their own language on their own lang. That prohibition was finally officially lifted in 1986. Today, the State of Hawai`i has two official languages, Hawaiian and English, established by the State Constitution of 1978.

It is important that everyone is educated on this because Hawaiians have struggled so much and our hard work not to educated foreigners and tourist on the correct idea of the Hawaiian islands. We are not labeled as paradise  and we are not here for others to live their “Hawaiian dream” when they do not educate themselves on the struggles Hawaiian now and their ancestors had to endure.

-Read at least one (or two) reading response(s) from Nov 16 and note down a few points on the blog that you notice as significant issues from both readings for the day. What do you see as similar or different from your own response? What do you learn from them?

Aaliyah

• Having great knowledge on your content can increase your confidence when presenting your arguments, which will help the credibility of your argument overall.
• understanding the rhetorical situation overall. For instance, there was an image of students attending a House of Representatives session of the Mississippi State legislature
• One of the strategies I found from reading the Forbes article was to avoid vagueness

My group members are Emily and Sabrina.

I decided to put write my blog about Sabrinaʻs writing.

• First, oral arguments should be written to be heard rather than read. ( she makes a good point because it needs to be equally as powerful and influential as the other)
• Long lengthy wordy syntax that is otherwise acceptable in a written argument won’t be effective in relaying your message to the audience. ( Such a extensive vocabulary means so much if your audience does not understand you, how will you persuade them)
•  With that being said, always be mindful of body posture and facial expressions. Since this will probably be how we give presentations on our arguments for the time being, it’s important to practice these skills.( body language is important because is expresses more about what the speaker is talking about usually)

Strengths

• ethos
• having outside supporting sources
• After reading the comments, I am able to support my essay with good ethos and outside supporting arguments. I plan on continuing these helpful methods for my essays to continue to grow as I also improve on my weaknessʻs along the way.

Weakness

• Do you have any specific examples from the article to show this?
• References? Please see APA Sample Paper under Week Eight Module for examples to do this section correctly.
• After reading the feedback within the margins, I noticed that I need to improve on major details on the structure that makes a good essay. I am able to come up with reasoning for certain details that help me improve my writing, however, it is not enough because I need evidence from an article for logos to be a strong suit in my writing. I also need to work on my referencing because in my essay it was not in the proper format.
• I need to improve on these key details immediately because it is essential to have these for a good essay

I chose to do my writing on Rubyʻs ideas from the monologue we were assigned to read last night. She did a great job mentioning the key details that the author included so the audience can understand their culture much more. She mentioned the reference to the language barrier between two families and how the two girls need to jump through hurdles just to understand each other. It also shows that their cultural differences did not stop them from learning from each other and attempt to create a strong bond. We had similarities  between being interested in the culture. Our major differences is that she focused on the granddaughters  scenarios as I focused on only the grandmotherʻs words.

Free Writing 3rd Essay

topic ideas

-double standrads for billingual people in America

-the traumatic history for Native Americans

-The redskin football team name

-amount of plastic bottle(reffillable stores)

-lost of Hawaiian language

-appropriation  of spiritual  beliefs

-how zoos are not safe for the animals

-hunting for sport

-flintʻs water

-how donald trump is handling COVID

-iwi kupuna

PRACTICE 

Please review the following sentences for errors in parallel structure. Correct the sentences by rewriting them. Not all sentences are incorrect. Answers may vary.

1. My dog is not only friendly but also playful.
2. We can go to the park or dance in the classroom.
3. Jeremy likes to read historic, realistic and speculative fiction.
4. When I went to the bar, I wanted to dance, to drink and to punch the rowdy faces.
5. Buying a car is not a decision to take lightly nor be careless about.
6. Tyler is for the legalization, not for the criminalization of marijuana.
7. Sally needs a new stove, dishwasher, and knives for her kitchen.
8. My first grade teacher taught me how to write, how to read and how to play tic-tac-toe.
9. She will not admit it, nor will she be apologizing.
10. The whole wheat pasta is better than enriched wheat pasta.
11. Literature classes teach students to analyze texts, think critically, and improve writing.
12. Beets are just as nutrient rich as rutabagas even though they are not in season.
13. Drunk drivers are thoughtlessly taking the lives of other people in their own hands, risking their own lives, thinking only about their own pleasure and fun, and not considering the consequences of their actions.
14. In order to convey the information correctly, the police officer spoke loudly to the crowd, told people where they should stand, repeated the information to help people remember, and gestured. 

Aaliyah & Jelo

• Flags are an example of visual arguments that the textbook used(states examples). Aaliyah builds of the ideas presented in the reading. Does a great job describing the background and history of each flag
• This is happening because one side of the political spectrum associates more with the American flag than the other side; making it a symbol for a group of people rather than representing a country. In America, our political beliefs say a lot about us and she described how people view others opinions
•  For example, the use of certain colors and fonts can affect the interpretation and the emotion of the audience.(ethos). She reviewed the importance of each detail and how it triggers people to react.
• From Jeloʻs writing she states,  Many people use images and visual designs to support an argument because photographs/visuals “will probably touch members of your audience more strongly than words alone could” (pg 350). which depicts the idea that nowadays people connect through things similar to screens because we use it so much in our daily lives.

My focus is on the the instagrammer named Kate Glavan. After viewing her story, you can see that she is very educated and aware of the issues occurring in the political system today. She uses her account as an opportunity to educate others on what is going on. She also advocates for climate change. Her beliefs also integrated into her daily lifestyle choices. She lives in New York City, where she bikes, uses public transportation, runs, visits the locals farmers market, and practices a vegan diet. Her lifestyle shows that what she speaks about on social media and her updates on our daily life are completely the same and honestly used. She also promotes clean beauty makeup brands which respect the environment and show that she is an ally to conforming to regular practices today but in ways that does it sustainably. In my opinion, she is my role model on the lifestyle I expect to have in the future because of what she presents on her social media.

http://Jamye Grace Aquino Kamali’i: https://instagram.com/kateglavan?igshid=vuzbzg3230m0 Me: https://instagram.com/kateglavan?igshid=vuzbzg3230m0

• why trump is not only a bad president but a bad person
• climate change
• stolen land to native people
• Privilege of running
• microagressions towards asians
• “you are what you eat
• food desserts
• corrupt politicians

Essay 2 outline(not a specified  topic)

Intro:

issue

why its an issue

how are people addressing it

best solution

conclusion