Feedback from group
My project is about AAPI hate crimes in the Bay Area, so I created a photo that would relate members of this community to the COVID-19 virus, as many of these violent acts were because of the stereotype connected with the pandemic.
After hearing this presentation, I was able to learn a lot about factory farming, especially as it’s something I never really thought about before. I do agree with the fact that animals should be treated humanely, but it’s pretty conflicting because animal products are very embedded both in my own diet and the food of my culture. I was fairly aware of the benefits it has on the environment, but it was interesting to see the benefits it has on our personal health. Many people believe that meat is the main/only source of protein, but there are many other foods that can replace the amount of protein we need. Although I still do plan on eating animal products, this presentation has reminded me of the importance of knowing where my food comes from.
When thinking about this project, the first idea (regarding social issues) that came to mind was something related to poverty. Specifically, poverty in my home country, the Philippines. I feel like a lot of the reason why is because it’s a third-world, underdeveloped country, but whenever I do go back home, seeing the severity of people’s living situations is completely unfathomable to me. I’m very aware I live such a privileged life- I grew up in a suburban community, I go to a private university in the city, and because of these things, I’m reminded that my problems are so minuscule in comparison to people who have to worry about where they’ll sleep or where they’ll find food to eat. As I’ve gotten older, I’ve looked more into poverty in this country and why it hasn’t really changed or improved as much as expected within the last decade or so. I used to think it was because it’s just a bunch of islands so there’s limited space or carrying capacity in comparison to the population growth. But I also think a lot of it has to do with the economy and the government (which is quite corrupt). I’m very passionate about this issue, but I’m not sure if it’s too broad of an idea for this project. Another idea I’m very passionate about is free healthcare in America. I think this is another very broad idea, but I think even if I specified it to a small town, the same can still be said for the entire country. People should be given the access and the resources they need to care for themselves, whether it be physically and/or emotionally. It’s upsetting and also confusing at the same time to think about why people have to pay hundreds of dollars for insulin, or why certain communities aren’t able to access mental health resources. Healthcare is something that’s never ever going to stop being needed. The reason we are able to go to school, work our jobs, and boost the economy, is because we have the healthy bodies and minds to do so. This is why I believe it should be of utmost priority for healthcare to be made more affordable and accessible across the entirety of America.
Fact-Checking Arguments:
Group Members: Katie, Sammy, Katelyn
Article: Vitamin K Injection for Babies Is Safe and Can Save Lives, Contrary to Post – FactCheck.org
FactCheck.org seems to use credible sources for it’s information on scientific evidence like the CDC, Yale and Harvard Health professors, the American Academy of Pediatrics, Committee on Nutrition, and various academic journals on cancer, pediatrics, and vitamin K. When citing and referencing these sources, the author does not insinuate any emotional language that can come off as being biased. When quoting the tweet from a user spreading misinformation on the vitamin K injection, they don’t manipulate the words, to change the meaning of the post. The author also brings up how vitamin K injections have been around for long periods of time, and misinformation is nothing new. They also bring up the fact that many vitamin K injections also include “other ingredients”, such as benzyl alcohol, which, if dosed correctly, is perfectly safe and is only there to help perserve the injection formula.
IDENTIFYING PLAGIARISM:
Dolci, Angelina, Katelyn
Is this plagiarism or not?
A. Directions: Read the following scenarios and decide whether it is a case of plagiarism or not.
(Y or N) and explain why.
__Yes, because she found information from a specific source and did not cite it.__ 1. Kyoko needs to write a report on American politics. She looks up Barack Obama in Wikipedia and discovers he is the 44th president of the United States. She includes this information in her report but doesn’t mention Wikipedia.
__Yes, because it still needs to be cited__2. Tam is writing a paper on a novel for his English class. Since the whole class is reading the same book, he doesn’t need to use a citation.
__No, because it’s his own work and his teacher approved it__3. Sugi wrote a paper for his European history class last semester and got an A on the paper. This semester, his Political Science class is addressing some of the same issues that are in his History paper. He checks with his professor first who agrees with Sugi, so he uses the material from his History paper.
__Yes, assuming it came directly from the internet and has no citations.___4. Ramiro, Stephan, April, and Chris are working on a group project. Chris submits his work and the others suspect that some of it came from the Internet, but it sounds good, so they submit it.
__Yes, because even if she did paraphrase she did not include a citation.___5. Maria finds a lot of good information for her paper on the Internet. She carefully changes the wording and prepares a good paraphrase. She doesn’t copy anything verbatim.
B. Directions: Decide whether the information described in each scenario will
Require citation of the source (Y or N) and explain why.
__No, as long as they mention the article/source’s name__1. You clearly identify the source at the beginning of a paragraph that summarizes the author’s ideas about teenage drinking. Since readers will naturally assume all of the ideas in the paragraph are from the source, no additional citation is necessary.
__No, because there is no specific source you’re pulling from.__2. In your paper on the history of aviation you state the date of the Wright brothers’ First successful flight at Kitty Hawk.
__Yes, because even if it is common knowledge it still needs to be cited.___3. In a paper on the civil rights movement you find some general, well known background information in an encyclopedia. It is obviously common knowledge, so you copy the information and include it in your paper.
__No, it’s not a recorded piece of evidence.__4. You ask your mother about the steps she went through in obtaining a bank load for a new car. You include this information in your paper.
__No, there’s no direct quote/paraphrasing__5. You skim a 325-page book entitled using the Internet . A major theme throughout the book is that the Internet is an important technological achievement. You include this in your paper.
__Yes, because you are using a portion of the article without citing.___6. You find an article that takes the same position you have taken on the subject of gun control. To save time you summarize in your paper a portion of the argument from the article, since the author’s ideas are identical to your own.
EVALUATING AN ANTI-RACIST ARTIFACT
Sarah, Taarini
This picture looks like a person not wearing a mask getting mad at someone most likely an asian wearing a mask because it was the time of covid. At the time many people were upset at the asian community and blamed them for the whole covid-19 pandemic because it originated from China. This created the stereotype that all asians were somewhat “dangerous” and “carriers” of COVID. This piece is impactful because it shows the severity of racism that the asian community went through.
After listening Taryn Coe’s perspective, I think it really correlated to my takeaways from Carmen Kynard’s essay. A point that I highlighted in my discussion response was that the discussion of minorities and other ethnic groups should be discussed in our classrooms. It is a reality that when you aren’t exposed people of other backgrounds, the only other methods to receive that exposure are from parents or teachers. And even beyond that, if the only people you can discuss race and racism with are people that aren’t educated about it, that increases the possibility of stereotypes and/or even prejudice. That is why it’s important to be educated and made aware, so you get a better understanding from facts and real-life experiences and not just opinions.
In regard to this education and awareness, another takeaway I received from both Coe’s audio and Kynard’s essay, is that it isn’t the responsibility of people of color to educate white people on these issues. Especially with something as prevalent as racism, it should be white people that want to put in the effort and that are willing to acknowledge the history of our country. Additionally, both of these pieces highlight how there should be a safe environment for people of color to share their concerns regarding racism both inside and outside the classroom.
Eliminating Wordiness:
For my rhetorical analysis, I found two articles that I am interested in doing, both of them being editorial pieces. One is about how the Barbie franchise has impacted feminists today, and the other explains why nostalgia is important for our health. I think the Barbie piece can have lots of ethos, as the author discusses her relationship with Barbie and the memories she has related to the dolls. This can be relatable to readers, because for some of us, we may have the same experiences as the author. It can also evoke pathos, because the discussion of Barbie can be nostalgic of childhood and tie to many memories, for example, receiving it as gifts, playing with sibling or friends, etc. This article is also very detailed, when discussing both the feminist movement and the specific elements of Barbies. The tone of the author’s writing also evokes a sense of care and again nostalgia, sounding reflective and using diction that feels almost like a battle, that even though many people would claim to dislike Barbies, they have a been a part of our lives. As for the nostalgia piece, I found it really relatable (especially with specific things mentioned) which I think also speaks for the author’s credibility and relatable-ness. There were quite a few examples of logos through the mention of studies and historical facts related to the idea of nostalgia and how it came to be. I think the idea of the article itself also evokes pathos, because nostalgia does make people emotional and reflective on the past. Because this essay is formatted mostly like a list, it really feels like a call to action to the audience. That by doing these things, you will reap the benefits that nostalgia has. The tone of the article is fairly informative, probably to try to sound knowledgeable and reliable to the audience.
Group members: Angelina, Skye
Reading Response: Dolci
Quote Sandwich
So much of the world today has changed due to COVID-19. It has made many people reevaluate their decisions, whether it be in regard to their family, careers, lifestyle, or even more specifically, their healthcare status. Many patients who have/are severely suffered from COVID, have made the decision to fill out a DNR (do not resuscitate). Researchers have looked into the correlation between the two, observing that “the risk of death from COVID-19 was significantly influenced by the patients’ DNR status” (LeDoux, 2023, para.1). By having a DNR status, patients chose to decline prolonged life support and active resuscitation measures. COVID; being such a hard-hitting illness, has affected many variables of people’s lives, including their mindset toward fighting it.
References:
COMPROMISED PATIENTS AND THE CULTURE-OF-DEATH MENTALITY IN HEALTH CARE: Fusion. (n.d.). https://eds.s.ebscohost.com/eds/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?vid=9&sid=28a9ae92-450e-4428-97e1-58fd73eb7cf6%40redis
2 ) The article “5 Critical Priorities for the U.S. Healthcare System” discusses 5 topics that healthcare providers should be prioritizing. Especially as healthcare has heavily evolved since COVID-19, healthcare now shouldn’t just primarily focus on treating sick people. But even beyond that, how to keep people healthy, along with making the system more affordable and accessible to all. These 5 priorities cover the latter ideas. The first idea discussed is helping to maintain people’s healthiness. Rathert than waiting for them to become sick then treating them, even healthy people should be working toward preventative measures. The second idea discussed is that for healthcare to be more accessible, racial inequality must be acknowledged and dismantled. The third idea which is in conjunction to accessibility, is promoting and utilizing more telehealth and home services. There are matters that can be dealt with outside of a hospital, so by utilizing more areas, we create a more productive healthcare system. Fourth relates to both affordability and accessibility, through having integrated healthcare systems. This makes healthcare more accessible to people, and money-wise can save both hospitals and patients money. Lastly is providing value-based care, meaning that healthcare providers would be paid based on their [patient outcomes. Though this can have varying opinions, this article states that it would promote “prevention and equity”. It also mentions statistics that have shown this method can reduce the costs of healthcare, ensuring prevention is prioritized, which lowers the amount of treatment needed. In light of the COVID pandemic, the healthcare system needs improving, and these 5 factors will make way for an accessible, affordable, and effective healthcare system.
AI SUMMARY:
3 ) The article discusses five critical priorities for the U.S. healthcare system in light of the COVID-19 pandemic. These priorities aim to make healthcare more accessible, affordable, and focused on keeping people healthy rather than solely treating illnesses.
The article argues that addressing these priorities in unison can lead to a healthier America with improved healthcare access and outcomes. It suggests that the healthcare system must adapt to the lessons learned from the pandemic, focusing on prevention, equity, and value-based care to ensure its sustainability and effectiveness.
4 ) Original Text:
Value-based care improves quality of life and corrects misaligned incentives (e.g., paying providers on the basis of the volume of procedures they perform rather than outcomes). It can reduce health care costs by making care more accessible and keeping people healthy, which reduces the treatments and procedures needed. (For example, over each of the past three years SelectHealth’s focus on value-based care enabled it to reduce its rates by 2% to 3% for those insured through the federal exchange.)
AI Explained:
“Value-based care” is a better way of taking care of your health. Here’s why it’s better:
For example, a health company called SelectHealth used value-based care, and it made healthcare cheaper for people by 2% to 3% each year for the past three years.
5 ) The question I asked the AI (which was included my chosen article) was, “what 5 key topics does the CDC state when addressing the social determinants for health?” After comparing what was in my article to the AI’s response, both key topics were identical. Yes, the further explanation was worded differently, but the names of the topics and the information were pretty much the same.
6 ) AI Citation: Harvard Business Review. (2021, December). 5 Critical Priorities for the U.S. Health Care System. https://hbr.org/2021/12/5-critical-priorities-for-the-u-s-health-care-system
This citation is accurate. I didn’t specify the format thought, but if I did it would be accurate as well.
7 ) I think it was pretty cool to experiment with AI. I think it’s super helpful and pretty accurate with its information. I do think the tone and diction used to create essays or pieces of writing can’t necessarily be replicated by AI, but I do find it to be a really reliable tool. This idea kind of ties into the ethics, meaning that a piece of technology can’t replicate authenticity and that sense of genuineness. I also think that with the use of AI, because it is overly helpful (meaning it can do everything for you), it won’t allow you to practice or improve on writing skills, and instead you can just become overly dependent on using it. I think that’s the “harm” of it, but I won’t deny its usefulness.
APA vs MLA
APA
MLA
Group Members: Katie Wolff, Gavin Lessard
1) The chickens on campus play a famous role for our school, they make us unique.
Corrected: The chickens on campus play a famous role for our school; they make us unique.
Type: CS
2) What if the chickens laid eggs and hid them somewhere they would get left behind.
Corrected: What if the chickens laid eggs and hid them somewhere? They would get left behind.
Type: R
3) The chickens bring laughter to our students, without them we’d be an ordinary school.
Corrected: The chickens bring laughter to our students. Without them, we’d be an ordinary school.
Type: CS
4) I remember, after my first class I was leading out to the bookstore unfortunately, I stepped on the chickens’ dump.
Corrected: I remember, after my first class I was heading out to the bookstore. Unfortunately, I stepped on the chickens’ dump.
Type: R
5) Right now, there are many chickens living freely on campus but many professors don’t want chickens.
Corrected: Right now, there are many chickens living freely on campus, but many professors don’t want chickens.
Type: R
6) Chickens should not be allowed to live freely on the campus because they cause stinky odors make noise and no one wants to clean after.
Corrected: Chickens should not be allowed to live freely on the campus because they cause stinky odors, make noise, and no one wants to clean after them.
Type: C
7) Anytime students want to lie down on the lawn they need a place that looks clean and has fresh air therefore they can not take a nap or study.
Corrected: Anytime students want to lie down on the lawn, they need a place that looks clean and has fresh air; therefore, they can not take a nap or study.
Type: R
8) But I strongly disagree with that opinion, chickens should not be allowed on campus at all.
Corrected: But I strongly disagree with that opinion. Chickens should not be allowed on campus at all.
Type: CS
9) During the time students are in the lab if the chickens make a lot of noise the students won’t focus on doing their job.
Corrected: During the time students are in the lab, if the chickens make a lot of noise the students won’t focus on doing their job.
Type: R
10) In conclusion, if the chickens live freely on campus because students let them live free then these students should clean the chickens’ mess.
Corrected: In conclusion, if the chickens live freely on campus because students let them live free, then these students should clean the chickens’ mess.
Type: R
GROUP WORK: RHETORICAL ANALYSIS (VISUAL)
Group Members: Katie Wolff, Beverly Amblo
Description: In the political cartoon, there are two people, one who represents former President Donald Trump, and one person representing American voters who looks like Uncle Sam, both sitting at a meeting table. Trump is pictured wearing a white t-shirt and the Uncle Sam character that represents American voters is wearing a suit and American Flag hat, with white hair, and a large pin that says “Voters” on it. The American voters are saying “You’re fired.” While Donald Trump is responding with “I’m suing.”
Rhetorical Analysis: This political cartoon is effective in showing that by the end of Trump’s term, voters no longer wanted him to be President. More specifically, by using the phrase “you’re fired”, you can assume that the American voters didn’t think he did a very good job at being the President. This is why after his first term, “firing him” meant they didn’t want him to continue for a second one. All the while, Trump’s response (“I’m suing”) is fitting to his typical actions, being childish and unwilling to accept what many of the American voters want.
