People should not use phones too much.

• reduce using them by making a limit by themselves

or

Plastic bags are killing tans of lives and destroying the earth

• use less plastic bags …..

I read a response by Siru and I noticed that she summarizes the essay very carefully while also giving a bit of analysis from her perspective. What we felt towards this essay about “shame” were somehow similar though we picked completely different parts as our intrigued phrases. She brought an example from an essay where indicates the author’s poorness and struggles.

Activity 1: For a long time, my stepson, Jonathan, was unhappy to have me as part of his family, for he resents that he didn’t have both biological parents at home. I try (tried) to get to know him better, but he would complain that I invade (invaded) his privacy. As a newcomer, I understood that our relationship will (would) require effort from both of us. It is not enough that I was friendly. Jonathan also has (had) to want us to be friends, and I was not happy with the two of us being strangers, but I can wait for him to feel more comfortable around me.

Activity 2: Anne Marie collects antique bottles and loved (loved) to turn them into works of art. She will buy bottles if she liked (likes) them, but she prefers to find them in the ground. She will find bottles everywhere, but she picked (picks) them selectively. However, she has the best luck at construction sites on old farmland, where she spent most of her time. Often, bottles appeared (appear) on the surface after a good rain, but they disappear very soon. She will use special tools for excavating (appears) bottles, including a set of brushes. She did (does) not want to break the bottles as she removes (removed) them from the ground. After finding a new bottle, Anne Marie will add it to her display case and hung (hang) on the wall as an artistic piece (Mangelsdorf, 2013, p. 411).

Yanpu and Kodai

One of the responses says the writers must have clear images of their topics in detail. This is similar to what I found in my response as well. I agree that this point is significant for creating more vivid arguments supported by evidence. Another thing that I found important is about the structure of presentations. The writer is required to make sure who is targeted, what should be taught, etc… This is cannot be ignored in order to improve and make the presentation more persuasive.

• pull someone’s leg – tease someone
• Fishy – suspicious
• Bite the dust – die, fail
• Lemon – people or things that are defected
• Jump the gun – don’t be hurry, calm down

After reading the graded version of essay 2, I noticed that there were several comments about APA citation. I was not careful enough to check the format according to the feedback. I believe that most of the references I found to support the primary article and its claim were well-used and highly reliable due to their credibility. Also, most importantly, I miss the part where I supposed to state which article I mainly analyzed. One thing I realized is that in essay 2’s feedback as well as essay 1’s, we did not get to receive detailed scores of where we lost points in a rubric form, so I am curious where I lost my points.

I read a response from Zheyu, he gives a well-organized brief summary of the essay “Shared Experiences of Multiethnic Children in Stealing Buddha’s Dinner” stating what Paula wants to tell us in the first place. He also raised a real-life example from his own experience of attending a Christian school with an Asian background: the difficulty of adapting to the environment and being part of a class while getting treated cold.

I read Weihong’s response to Marilyn’s essay. He chose an example of a name of food, “phoenix web.” As he is the one who speaks Chinese, he explains the story behind this name from his own perspective by using his knowledge as a bilingual. I found that he and I kind of focused on a similar point about the towns in the neighborhood. Weihong raises this as an argument of this essay and this is a part of “political correct.”

I will be writing about whether people should consume less junk food or not. Since I am a huge fan of eating junk food, I was curious how that food affects our body and health. I already know that having too much junk food is an unhealthy habit and sometimes destroys or weakens our body.

•  statistics showing how nutritious they are
•  statistics of how often people eat them, etc.

One of my group members, Victoria, made a very thoughtful response to the reading of chapter 14 about visual rhetorics. In her response, she briefly summarizes the main purpose of the whole last part of the chapter in her own words while answering those requirements from the reading assignment. She also gives careful and details explanations on how she reacted to the examples of using visuals from the text.

On the other hand, another group member, Zoe, also provides a nicely organized response to the chapter by using other examples from Victoria as well as mine. She also gives a brief summary and explains in detail. Moreover, she uses a variety of vocabulary to avoid repetition and tries to combine more rhetorical terms. It is interesting that we all have picked very different examples from each other.

From the response by Noga to the book chapter 14: Visual rhetorics, she carefully provides a brief summary of what visual arguments are for us and how they are made. Visual arguments could exist everywhere we live with several different forms of appearance such as pictures, videos, drawings, etc. to create more opportunities for the audiences to relieve messages. Noga also uses an example from both the text and real-life to strengthen her opinion of visual arguments. We kind of had similar thoughts to the effectiveness and convenience of these arguments that contain all of the rhetorical appeals (pathos, ethos, and logos).

Group-Siru, Kodai, Andrew

1. My dog is not only friendly but also playful.
2. We can go to the park or dance in the classroom.
3. Jeremy likes to read historical, realistic, and speculative fiction.
4. When I go to the bar, I want to dance, drink and punch on the rowdy faces.
5. Buying a car is not a decision to take lightly nor carelessly.
6. Tyler is for the legalization, not the criminalization of marijuana.
7. Sally needs a new stove, a dishwasher, and knives for her kitchen.
8. My first grade teacher taught me how to write, read, and play tic-tac-toe.
9. She will not admit it, nor will she apologize.
10. The whole wheat pasta is better than enriched wheat pasta.
11. Literature classes teach students to analyze texts, think critically, and improve writing.
12. Beets are just as nutrient rich as rutabagas even though they are not in season.
13. Drunk drivers are thoughtlessly taking the lives of other people in their own hands,

risking their own lives, thinking only about their own pleasure and fun, and not considering the consequences of their actions.

14. In order to convey the information correctly, the police officer spoke loudly to the crowd

, told people where they should stand, repeated the information to help people remember, and gesture.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R1E3Zu2DLtE

The video essay we choose is about the environment. It shows all kinds of beautiful senses on the earth at the beginning of the video. Then, suddenly turn to all the pandemic we are experiencing right now, such as earthquakes, hurricanes, tsunami, and so on. Human behavior is the major reason that causes so many pandemics. In the video, humans throw tons of trash into the ocean, cut down too many trees, and so on. It shows that the humans living on the earth are destroying their home. The author makes an argument about humans should stop hurting Mother Earth because we are also hurting ourselves. The author is trying to persuade the audience that we have done too much damage to the earth, and we should protect the earth together. 

Throughout the video essay, the use of pathos stood put the most. The essay contains a variety of pictures that evoke the audience’s mind to convince them that we need to take some actions to save the surrounding environment as well as animals. Those images the author used are very powerful and have so much depth behind which further explore the facts that people destroying our mother lands by themselves. By displaying those pictures with only necessary sentences with arguments, it brings the audiences to have an opportunity to create discussions whether the arguments are reliable or not. The author somewhat successfully persuades the audience by suggesting clear ideas of what they want to present with relevant images. 

Liting, Yongkui, Kodai

I read a response by Chandler and he clearly gives the summary of what the chapter is about with his own words. He explains both the advantages and disadvantages of using social media while in the process of creating multimodal arguments. Unlike my response, he expresses more of his opinion when answering the effectiveness of the video. He also brings up a specific example from the text to further discuss his thoughts by connecting them with facts.

I chose a post from one of the most famous chefs, Gorden Ramsay who shows up on several TV series in the U.S. He is known for invective characteristics when he gives reviews to those chefs who are suffering from customer satisfaction. Sometimes, he literally tells that the meal tastes like garbage and everyone else in the place would be frozen for a second. Since then a lot of people think that he is such a verbally violent person while being a great chef with amazing skills and knowledge.

In his post about advertising a pizza restaurant that he will be opening on 4/12, he carefully provided some good things about going there to eat with a very short video of around 30 seconds. Since the video itself is really short, he chose only the important and interesting facts about the restaurant and simply stating what they are. When advertising, he is focusing on details that evoke our emotional parts such as saying there will be “the best street pizza” served at the restaurant. So we are curious how it tastes like and gives a passion to visit there. Also, he uses his iconic powerful and vulgar language as usual which emphasizes the relationship between him and this restaurant.

https://www.instagram.com/p/CNCXxBRjYEn/?utm_source=ig_web_copy_link

I am thinking to do a rhetorical analysis about either some new news related to the recent economic situation in Japan or some article talking about the new Japanese government policy to reduce carbon emissions to “Zero”. Both would be interesting and have so many contents to include within the essay, but I am more curious about the topic related to the policy towards greenhouse gas. I can discuss what should be happening now and in the future and how Japanese people think about carbon dioxide destroying our planet from many perspectives. Then I look into the structure/ format of the article to analyze how it effectively provides us the information.

An article about the policy :

1. discuss what has been thought in the text and relate to some of my thoughts
2. analyze the text

• analyze the context
• analyze the structure and organization
• how the author uses examples to effectively demonstrate the idea

3. conclusion

1. Drunk drivers are involved in more than 50 percent of traffic deaths. (Hard evidence; there is a data)
2. DNA tests of skin found under the victim’s fingernails suggest that the defendant was responsible for the assault. (Hard evidence/ constructed argument; there is a piece of evidence/ fact but seems like a statement at the same time)
3. A psychologist testified that teenage violence could not be blamed on video games. (Constructed argument; Even though it contains a bit of evidence, it kind of looks like a summary of what the psychologist did)
4. The crowds at President Trump’s inauguration were the largest on record. (Hard evidence; this fact is from the record)
5. “The only thing we have to fear is fear itself.” (Constructed argument; this is a statement)
6. Airbags ought to be removed from vehicles because they can kill young children and small-framed adults. (Hard evidence; the reason shown is like common sense)