My peer, Victoria stated in her response that after reading the text, she realized the first step we need to take in order to write an agreement is to consider our beliefs based on distinct facts. The use of a story of writing by Kellyanne Conway is a great example of demonstrating the skills that the author discussed in the previous passage. Moving on to the next part of her response to the APA sample essay, she shared her realization of learning new knowledge through the text as well as the passion for using skills she learned.

 

Combine each sentence pair into a single sentence using either a coordinating conjunction or a conjunctive adverb. Then copy the combined sentence onto your own sheet of paper.

1. Pets are not allowed in Mr. Taylor’s building, but he owns several cats and a parrot.
2. New legislation prevents drivers from sending or reading text messages while driving; however,  many people continue to use their phones illegally.
3. The coroner concluded that the young man had taken a lethal concoction of drugs, yet by the time his relatives found him, nothing could be done.
4. Amphibians are vertebrates that live on land and in the water; instead, flatworms are invertebrates that live only in water.
5. Ashley carefully fed and watered her tomato plants all summer, so the tomatoes grew juicy and ripe.
6. When he lost his car key, Simon attempted to open the door with a wire hanger, a credit card, and a paper clip; then, he called the manufacturer for advice.

 

Combine each sentence pair into a single sentence using a subordinating conjunction and then copy the combined sentence onto your own sheet of paper.

1. Jake is going to Mexico because there are beautiful beaches in Mexico.
2. A snowstorm disrupted traffic all over the east coast, so that there will be long delivery delays this week.
3. Since my neighbor had his television volume turned up too high, I banged on his door and asked him to keep the noise down.
4. Jessica prepared the potato salad and the sautéed vegetables while Ashley marinated the chicken.
5. After Romeo poisons himself, Juliet awakes to find Romeo dead and stabs herself with a dagger.

By Liting, Kodai

 

A wise old gentleman retired and bought a home near a Middle School. He mostly spent his summers in his cottage. Then the school year begins, and his peace and quiet came to a sudden halt.
On the first day of school, three boys came down. The alley beating merrily on every trash they see, and the same thing happened the next day, and the noise started driving the wise old man crazy—time for action.
The next afternoon he stoped the drummers as they banged their way down the street. He said, “You kids are a lot of fun! I love hearing your drumming because it is so cheerful, and it reminds me of what I use to do at your age. Will you do me a favor?”
The boys looked at him suspiciously. “What?” they ask. “I’ll give you a dollar if you promise to come around every single day and keep beating on those trash cans,” said the man.
The boys were thrilled. Every day they pounded on trash cans and collected a dollar.
After about a week, the wise old man stopped the boys again, and this time he looked a little bit sad. “I still love you’re drumming,” he said to the boys. However, I was afraid of spending a dollar a day, and it was hard on me. I was on a fixed income. From now on, I was only going to be able to pay you 50 sense to beat on the cans.
The boys weren’t too happy, but they decided to accept 50 cents a day, and they continued beating on all the trash cans. After another week, the clever old man stopped the boys again. “I’ve got more bad news,” he said. “My Social Security check hasn’t come yet, so I’m not going to be able to give you more than 25 cents a day. Is that all right?”
“Are you kidding?” said one of the boys. “We’re not going to waste our time beating on those trash cans for only a lousy quarter! We quit!”
The wise old man smiled and enjoyed his peace and quiet.

In the reading response to chapter 6 yesterday by Yanpu, I found that we kind of share similar thoughts that we focused on. He commented statements and proofs are necessary when writing arguments. The points by writers must be following evidence and having a well-organized structure to make everything reliable. I do agree with that idea, and I also wrote something close in my reading response as well; saying arguments should be supported by relevant evidence. On the other hand, our comments on the second part of the response which discuss Hauter’s analysis of Kristof’s essay are different from each others’. While I reviewed as whole writing, the structure or format, he pointed out a specific example that Hauter uses.

The academic writing, The Gender Construct in the Use of Rhetorical Appeals, Hedges, and Boosters in ESL Writing: A Discourse Analysis by Bernardita G. Bacang, Richard M. Rillo, and Ericson O. Alieto, discusses the differences within ELS writer’s arguments between each gender in terms of rhetorical appeals. Through the writing, the differences are being exposed which claims to appear in the use of logos, pathos, and ethos. They stated, “The study found that male ESL learners prevalently use logical appeal […] while the female learners use emotional appeal” (p211). This line is very powerful and concrete for us as an audience and somehow provides a sense of common knowledge that male think problem more logically while female goes by emotions as it says. This might not be a fact for everyone but interesting to consider when analyzing writings based on this information.

Reference:

Bacang, B. G., Rillo, R. M., & Alieto, E. O. (2019). The Gender Construct in the Use of Rhetorical      Appeals, Hedges and Boosters in ESL Writing: A Discourse Analysis. Asian EFL Journal Research Articles., 25, 210–224. https://files.eric.ed.gov/fulltext/ED600782.pdf

Visual Argument

This image is about equal justice. There are two people with different colors standing by holding a flag saying “EQUAL JUSTICE,” and two police officers are asking the black guy whether he has permission to do this movement or not. In addition, those police officers are both white we zoom into their faces, their facial expressions showing a sense of madness. Throughout the image, the painter is trying to argue about the difference between each race in terms of their equality. 

The action of the police in this political cartoon refers to some current events or phenomenon concerning racial inequality, like the Freud incident happened last summer, in which people of color are treated differently or violently by the police or government officials. The artist of the cartoon utilizes irony as the two figures holding the “Equal Justice” sign are in fact being treated equally by the police at the moment, which is an immediate sarcastic response to the sign that they are holding.

We think this cartoon is very effective and conveys the message. The viewer needs to think for himself what is going on in the picture and understand the message behind it. The message is conveyed in a sophisticated way and makes the viewer feel uncomfortable towards the Latin man. The fact that the Latin man and the white man hold together a sign calling for equality, but the police only address the Latin man reinforces the message.

Noga, Zoe, and Kodai

 I read Alex’s response and noticed that he summarizes the text well at the beginning, then he uses some direct quotes from the text very nicely. Also, he defines the meaning of rhetorical analysis in his own words that clearly shows his understanding of the topic as well as the text. 

Passage 1:

A man from the city came to visit a small farm, he saw a farmer feeding pigs in a very strange way. The farmer would lift a pig up to a nearby apple tree, the pig would eat the apples directly off the tree. The farmer would move the pig from one apple to another until the pig was full, then he would start again with another pig.

A man from the city came to visit a small farm; he saw a farmer feeding pigs in a very strange way. The farmer would lift a pig to a nearby apple tree; the pig would eat the apples directly off the tree. The farmer would move the pig from one apple to another until the pig was full, then he would start again with another pig.

The man from the city was pretty puzzled, he watched for quiet a while, finally said, “What a strange way to feed pigs! It’s a waist of time! You could save a hole lot of time if you just shook the apples off the tree and let the pigs eat them from the ground!” The farmer looked puzzled and replied, “What’s time to a pig?”

The man from the city was pretty puzzled; he watched for quite a while, finally said, “What a strange way to feed pigs! It’s a waste of time! You could save a whole lot of time if you just shook the apples off the tree and let the pigs eat them from the ground!” The farmer looked puzzled and replied, “What’s time for a pig?”

 Passage 2:

A young man waiting in line at the bank. Developed a loud case of hiccups. Got worse and worse. By the time he got to the teller’s window, he couldn’t hardly talk. Handing the teller his check to cash.

A young man waiting in line at the bank developed a loud case of hiccups. It got worse and worse. By the time he got to the teller’s window, he could hardly talk. He was handing his check to the teller to cash.

The teller tapped numbers into the computer. In a moment of t looking up and frowning. “I can’t cash your check,” she said.

The man was shocked. “Why not?” he asked.

 

“The computer indicates you do not have sufficient funds to cover this amount,” she said. “In fact our records show that your account is overdrawn by more than $5000.00.”

“It can’t be!” cried the man. “Youve got to be kidding!”

“Your rite. I am,” she smiled. She started counting out his cash. “You will notice that your hiccups are gone, though!”

“The computer indicates you do not have sufficient funds to cover this amount,” she said. “In fact, our records show that your account is overdrawn by more than $5000.00.”

“It can’t be!” cried the man. “You’ve got to be kidding!”

“Your rite. I am,” she smiled. She started counting out his cash. “You will notice that your hiccups are gone, though!”

Source: M. S. Samston (2005)

In my group, we watched a short speech, “A one minute TEDx Talk for the digital age,” by Woody Roseland. The most appealing that stood up in his speech is the use of pathos. He talks to the audiences’ emotional part to pull attention and gives more variety of appearances. For example, he made a joke brought up a question asking, “Why are balloons so expensive?” then he answers, “Inflation.” Many of the audience was laughing and he successfully caught their interest in his speech. I noticed that using humor is crucial not only in writings but also in speeches. In addition to it, throughout the whole speech, he gives a lot of body languages like hand gestures and clear facial expressions. These physical appearances are also necessary to speak to the audiences’ mind.

I read Derek’s response, and I found some differences between the parts each of us picked to comment on. He says writing the writer’s real feelings and thoughts is necessary for good writing. I strongly agree with this idea and it reminds me of my high school teacher telling me a similar thing when writing essays. Also, Derek says the use of transitional expressions and repetition words could be another way to construct good writing. I believe this is true in terms of making an effective paragraph as well.

My story is going to take a place in my high school life in the States with a lot of friends from various countries. I will be telling this story by sharing my rich experience in four years. Also, in order to do so, I will be carefully introducing where, when, what, who, etc. all the necessary information to set up the image that a want to share. For expanding the story in terms of contents, I will also be using a specific comparison between there and my home to see the major differences and even similarities and how I was feeling about those. In addition, many of the scenes in my story will be about my experience in the school dormitory as an international student, though I will also be including daily life experiences as well with domestic friends or even strangers.

 

I read Damon’s response and I found that:

• he first summarizes the discussion topic well.
• he uses a quote from a book he chose and using well to support his opinion to the question.
• in terms of the importance of writing, we share similar thoughts. ex. he stated logic is a crucial piece and I strongly agree with it.

Last year when I was still a high school student, I was spending my life in Seattle, Washington. I lived there for four years and explored so many places even outside of Seattle. I usually hang out with a few of my friends who lived in the dorm with me and we were so close to each other almost like family. Whenever we go far distances, we took Uber or Lift to travel. So, I was getting used to the convenient life with Uber as well as Uber Eats for meals. For Uber Eats we kind of ordered either lunch or dinner every single day because of the quality of cafeteria food. I still remember that McDonald’s was one of our favorite places to order from since it is cheap, quick, and good taste. However, ever since I came back to my home in a countryside city in Japan, there are no Uber services at all. I was a bit sad and felt so jealous of people who live in big cities.

 

a story about a high school life

• talking about rich experiences I had
• give some brief information of how I spent time

how different from there and my home

• use some specific examples of differences and even similarities
• how I felt about those

In the article “17 Cooking Tips Our Food Staff Swears By” by Beckey Hughes, it discusses the steps that people need to follow, and it gives hints to make sure that people are cautious while cooking. To propose the cooking tips. Share the author’s own experiences. Make sure people can be careful when they cook. And these tips can help people reduce a lot of troubles. And it’s ready for every reader or person who is interested in cooking.

She writes “A wise French chef from a Pixar movie once said, ‘Anyone can cook.’ And he’s right.” We also believe that this is true. As long as the cook follows those tips listed correctly, anyone, even some who have never cooked before are able to serve a meal that is edible. The author successfully delivers readers her arguments that she lists all the 17 tips clearly with carefully detailed explanations. After reading this article, readers are forced to try cooking by their desire of challenging a new thing. 

Xinhuan and Kodai

In Alex’s response, he discusses the support of the child of learning literacy by using a scene where Yun Wangand Pengfei’s mom help Pengfei. He focuses a lot more on the contents of the essay and summarizes the whole story with his own words well. The biggest difference between Alex’s post and mine is that he picked a particular part from the essay to introduce while I commented as a whole essay. I noticed that he transitions his idea to the evidence smoothly, so I think I somehow can learn from that. I believe he is following the guidelines and stating his own opinion well at the same time. Though I wanted to know more about how he feels about this essay more.