Abby’s audio essay showed us about her puppy she got, I loved the pictures and how she narrated her story. It was cute and something I liked listening too, and also easy to follow along, her slides flowed very well and it all made sense. I know she has editing to do but for a rough draft I think she has an excellent start.

In jaspers rough draft it shows how he learned to be a DJ and what he did to pursue his art by buying everything he needed to make that come true and how he will do it in the future. I think his start is great and has a great rough draft. maybe more color and clearer pictures. other than that both of their drafts were really good.