Korinne Moss, Ariana Hoohuli, Nate Alvarez

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Professor Tika

November 19, 2021

 

Activity 1: For a long time, my stepson, Jonathan, was unhappy to have me as part of his family, for he resents that he didn’t have both biological parents at home. I try to get to know him better, but he would complain that I invade his privacy. As a newcomer, I understood that our relationship will require effort from both of us. It is not enough that I was friendly. Jonathan also has to want us to be friends, and I was not happy with the two of us being strangers, but I can wait for him to feel more comfortable around me.

Corrected: For a long time, my stepson, Jonathan, was unhappy to have me as a part of his family, for he resented that he didn’t have both biological parents at home. I tried to get to know him better, but he complained that I was invading his privacy. As a newcomer, I understood that our relationship required effort from both of us. It was not enough that I was friendly. Jonathan also had to want us to be friends, and I was not happy with the two of us being strangers, but I waited for him to feel more comfortable around me.

Activity 2: Anne Marie collects antique bottles and loved to turn them into works of art. She will buy bottles if she liked them, but she prefers to find them in the ground. She will find bottles everywhere, but she picked them selectively. However, she has the best luck at construction sites on old farmland, where she spent most of her time. Often, bottles appeared on the surface after a good rain, but they disappear very soon. She will use special tools for excavating bottles, including a set of brushes. She did not want to break the bottles as she removes them from the ground. After finding a new bottle, Anne Marie will add it to her display case and hung on the wall as an artistic piece (Mangelsdorf, 2013, p. 411).

 

Corrected: Anne Marie collects antique bottles and loves to turn them into works of art. She will buy bottles if she likes them, but she prefers to find them in the ground. She will find bottles everywhere, but she picks them selectively. However, she has the best luck at construction sites on old farmland, where she spent most of her time. Oftentimes, bottles appear on the surface after a good rain but they disappear very soon. She uses special tools to excavate bottles, including a set of brushes. She does not want to break the bottles as she removes them from the ground. After finding a new bottle, Anne Marie adds it to her display case and hangs it on the wall as an artistic piece (Mangelsdorf, 2013, p. 411).