November 30 in-class writing

For my argument speech that is due to this Friday, I think to bring the topic of the dangers in vaping Electronic cigarettes. This topic is highly interested me because I have heard about people that died from vaping these products even though that the companies that produce it says it won’t harm you. I saw a report the other day that mentioned that more than 20 percents of the population smoke electronic cigarettes. That is a large part of the population, in my opinion and I think that something has to be done because many people can be harmed by the use of these products and might lead to short to long term problems. I know that many people find fun in vaping e-cigarettes, but I want to raise the awareness of the damages it can cause and to prevent my peers for this class to consume electronic cigarettes from any kind. For the solution of this problem I suggest to force the companies to do researches on the consequences of electronic cigarettes on people’s life. Then, to force them to publish their results on the cover of the product so the consumers would be able to see the results of what vaping do the human body. I think that it is obvious that the results will not encourage the people to use these things and think again before they inhale from the product. The best option is clearly to stop smoking, but I know that it is not applicable because there are people that must smoke something. The best alternative might be vaping weed maybe? or steam.

November 18 in class writing

I was in the breakout room with Hang.

There are many similarities in our response; Hang wrote about the humiliation that Gregory, the author had to go through in one of his classes. We both talked about the struggles of being an African-American in United States society. I think that the main point of Hang wrote about is that Gregory was offended because of the teacher who mentioned that he has no father. In my response, I talked about it as well, but my main point was that the most humiliated thing that the teacher said to him was “We are collecting this money for you and your kind”. So I think that what was extremely difficult for Gregory was the racial and financial problem that made him feel like he has things to be ashamed of.

 

I think that one thing that shook the state of Israel was Yitzhak Rabin assassination. Last week it was 25 years to his death. He was the prime minister for 3 years in a row (7 years in total) when he got murdered. Rabin is known for his political aspirations for peace in the Middle East. A large part of the population on Israel was against few agreements that he was in charge for. In 1995,  Rabin walked down the stairs after an inspirational speech in a rally for peace. An armed man who hid at the bottom of the stairs, shot Rabin and hit him with 2 bullets in his back. After few hours he was hospitalized and underwent surgery, the doctors had to determined his death. Although I was not born when he was alive, I think that he was really good man that tried to change to middle east area. Now days, we can never know how things were looked like if Rabin was still alive and was able to set these  agreements with our neighboring countries. I think that the middle east would thrive financially because many countries would be able to make businesses together, unlike now.

November 16 in class writing

I read Zhiheng Wang response.

For the response on the book’s pages, I think he did pretty good job talking about the needs of the audience, preparation, and practice on the goals of the presentation. I think that he presented in a good and clear way the ideas that the author tried to deliver, but I think what differ my response that I wrote about why am I think that these ways are effective and important to include in a presentation.

I think that he should have write about the Forbes article as we were told to, but probably did not notice that. My suggestion to him is to add response for this article because it is big part of today’s activities.

November 11 group work

Worked together in the group with Alisha and Runze

In the link we can see Bibi Netanyahu, the prime minister of the state of Israel, reveals Iran’s nuclear weapon program, and that they are enriching their nuclear record. We liked the presentation because it is short and effective, and it is about an important topic. In the presentation, Netanyahu uses visual materials such as charts, graphs, and presentation slides, which are major tools in order to convey a message and support his claim or argument. His slides are clear and easy for the audience to process. Netanyahu also uses humor in his presentation in order to reach to the audience. He delivers a good show by showing a video of on of the Iranian’s heads, saying that they do not have a nuclear weapon, and immediately contrasting him and prove that he is wrong. We think that the use in humor is a great way to connect to the audience. He used straight forward syntax and concrete diction because he avoids long complicated sentences. When he has to deal with abstract ideas, he illustrate them with concrete examples.

https://www.washingtonpost.com/news/monkey-cage/wp/2018/05/04/what-netanyahus-dramatic-speech-about-irans-nuclear-program-both-revealed-and-concealed/

November 11 in class writing

I worked in a group with Alisha and Ruki.

After reading Ruki’s response, I do not think that he understood the purpose of this discussion because he did not provide any examples from the book, as we were asked to. In order to improve his writing, I suggested him to try read the instructions more carefully, and answer exactly what the question asks. About Alisha’s response, I think we both gave the example of Martin Luther King Jr. that talked about the repetition and parallelism in his speech “I Have a Dream”. We both talked about the importance of the introduction of a presentation because it  gives the audience a clue of what the argument is about and what opinion the author holds. I think what both can do better for the next time is providing own examples in order to show why you think these examples become more effective than the others.

October 28 Essay 2 Feedback

In the feedback for essay 2, I think that my points strengths are that I am providing good examples of how the topic is connected or touching me, and bringing my own experiences. I also think that I showed my argument in a very persuasive way so the audience can understand and relate to. I think that my weaknesses point are that I need to stick to the analyzing more, in terms of explaining logos, ethos or pathos from the point of view of the author, and show how how he his effected by it; Why is he chose to write on that specific topic to and bring it to the attention of readers. Another point is that I think I should follow the APA style more carefully, by providing page or paragraphs numbers after quotation

October 28 in class writing

I was in the breakout room with Abby and Elly. Reading Elly’s response, I liked how she summarized the main argument Paula Mirando wrote about in her article and I think she did it in a very good gist. But I think I wrote more examples from the story and what problems Nguyen and her difficulties were. I liked how she discussed about the topic of multi-ethnicity from her own point of view, by explaining that she was raised to accept all her identities and cultures. Abby’s response is really impressed me. She also discussed about the main argument in the story, and explained how Nguyen was struggling to find her identity she would like to live and explore. I think that I write what was the main argument in the article, but If I would wrote the response again, I would male sure to let the audience know that it is the main argument before I discussed about it.

October 26 free writing

Proposal argument – need to convince the audience about a specific topic. Have to think about a problem that bothers me or something that I would like to see changed. Maybe to write about why is football, soccer and basketball are the most profitable sports. As a tennis player, it is so annoying to know that if I would like to play tennis for living I have to be in the top 300 in the world. I am carious about how much people are able to make living of football, soccer, or basketball in the world. I think that the numbers will be much higher than they are in tennis. It effects me because I know that I probably will have to retire if I will not find any sponsor. It makes me mad because I worked so hard for so many years and same guys in my age that worked even less harder than me, are getting well paid in different sports. I think my proposal is to raise the awareness for the situation of the tennis players. Maybe to strike and stop playing until at least the top one thousand players will be able to play and get money for it.

October 26 in class writing

I read Kadi’s response about the essay Monologue that was written by Marilyn Chin. I like how he interpreted the essay by using his point of view of how blessed he is to express himself the way he want. Kadi also  wrote about the difficulties the narrator is going through and how it effected her; And tells that he can understand how frustrating it is to not be able to express yourself the way you want to. As I wrote in my response, her grammar mistakes is not her fault or something that she wished for, but it is just reflect on the place the narrator comes from. In my response, I wrote more about how still, with the inability of the grandmother to talk a grammatically correct English, her surrenders can totally understand her and not take offense from her little racist sayings; They know it is just her way to express herself and in her words “To tell the truth”.

October 19 in class writing

I worked with the group with Abby and Jasper.

I liked to read both answers, but I think Abby’s response is not referred to this number of pages, but to the pages is for Wednesday’s activity. Her response is very good, but not taken from pages 346-351. In her response, she writes in details about how to make the visual arguments appeal to the audience, and also gives two examples from the pages. I liked how she gave the example of Zelda, the video game, which its cover from 2017 is more appealing to the audience because of the colors. She describes how the selection of colors and designs have an influence on the appeal to the audience. In Jasper’s response, I think he gave good background about how the media and technology changed the world. What I think he could have done better is to write more about how visual arguments are constructed.