Apr 3rd In-Class Writing

From the comments, I understand my problem such as does not mention the main idea that often through the essay. Need more text to prove my points. There also has a lot of grammar issue as well.  The challenge for me is that since it is an analysis kind of essay, hard for me to think critically with other sources to prove one text that I choose. Sometimes I feel confused and think off the line.  I may try to be more patient next time, read through my paper several times and try to ask myself some kind of question, am I explain clearly. I might also find some friend to read through my paper as well, to see am I missing something. Since sometimes I thought I explain clearly enough which I really don’t.