From the comments, I understand my problem such as does not mention the main idea that often through the essay. Need more text to prove my points. There also has a lot of grammar issue as well. The challenge for me is that since it is an analysis kind of essay, hard for me to think critically with other sources to prove one text that I choose. Sometimes I feel confused and think off the line. I may try to be more patient next time, read through my paper several times and try to ask myself some kind of question, am I explain clearly. I might also find some friend to read through my paper as well, to see am I missing something. Since sometimes I thought I explain clearly enough which I really don’t.
By reading Jonne’s response she said “The poor ones live in tenements, whereas the wealthy people live in better condition and do not pay any attention or care to the poorer people,” that catches my attention. How is that happen, why is so effective in society?
She also combines the article “”The Defining Challenge of Our Time” and “The Defining Challenge of Our Time”. She mentions that “Some people work hard every day to have a better future, but sometimes due to their social class or race, they don’t have the equal treatment or opportunity as wealthy people.” How to balance different class conditions and create general happiness.
In Jonne’s words “Because of the presence of inequality in this generation, children in the next generation will also have a similar situation to their parents and this is how inequality keeps existing. Everyone deserves to have real and equal opportunities and to strive for their American dream.” That is a strong comment, and it talks about the truth. As a citizen, we should think about this question, what kind of environment we want to create for our next generation.
The feedback means a lot to me. I will try my best to keep my essay in a logical way and have strong facts to prove my argument. I will work on the reference more careful, by following the APA format show under the module. I may try to put some personal experience that is affected to the topic that can bring the resonance to make the argument much stronger.
Shady and I have similar comments. We both agree that we like the way that the author portrayed ideas through his life experiences, and by showing the historical background as well. The author also uses clearly data and feeling to support his point of view. The stories he told and used in the essay where fun and interesting, also reflects the school life he has.
By reading “Global Digital Divide” I realize that learning should not be a painful process. People should have a desire for knowledge, and science and technology, scientific curiosity. This can get more knowledge to enrich themselves. The exam depends in part on how much you have learned about the subject, not on the absolute. But learning is necessary, and it takes a lifetime to practice.
After I read Raha’s response and discussion between us, here are some points that we compare and contrast.
- to show the benefits in long-term, how to improve your self.
- it is student own responsibility to think and balance the opportunity cost.
- It is important to learn the variety of courses, to show the importance of education and personal potential energy.
- Raha thinks that if a student really wants to study the tuition is not a problem. Nowadays, society specific as in American people should engage them self to the college.
- In my opinion, these problems based on personal value.
- hard to connect text and pictures well
- how to decide voice cover, how to use it.
- how to take the video with the storyline, instead of putting a bunch of images
- if misleading the topic how to decide either change the text or retake the video
- all important include visualize, listening, and speaking
To some extent, Chinese parents require their children to go to a university or even a high ranking university. They think such a starting point will be different and the future life will be better. In China, education is more like box education. Everything we learn has a particular answer and must be positive. In the United States, education is more like a discussion what you think and how you prove your idea. Chinese education creates good test taker, but American’s education creates good course taker. Education in the United States also better creates practice opportunities for students. Many American children have been doing internships or even taking part-time jobs since high school. But for most Chinese students, they don’t get their first job until they enter college or even graduate. Chinese schools do not demand volunteers. Therefore, students will not adapt to the new working period. Education in the United States is harder to get into college. For China, education is the most difficult part of the process. So another common phenomenon is that when students enter the university, they will indulge themselves. College students in China don’t value grades, and you can even take a make-up exam during the holidays if you fail. While college is the most important time to teach you how to survive in society, it will also nurture you in your field of expertise and give you easy control over your future work. Overall I would prefer American education better. When I study in the United States is more likely I am learning a thinking skill. When I study in China is more likely I am trying to memorize all the points that teacher try to teach me. For the future life in society, the American style of study will help me move further. It taught me how to think about problems, as well as how to link problems and facts. It taught me to be creative, not to take a test.
By reading at Amber Floyd’s “Dream Deferred,” the entire article revolves around the Dream Act. Dream Act as “commonsense legislation drafted by both Republicans and Democrats that would give students who grew up in the United States a chance to contribute to our country’s well-being by serving in the U.S. Armed Forces or pursuing a higher education” (Cited by Mirada in 2014-2015, p. 183). Floyd shows us the three main arguments from “dream act.” Firstly, the act promotes the ideal of injustice. The act helps the children but undermines the whole family (Floyd, p.184). Secondly, regarding our economy, increasing taxes to help fund immigrants to go to college will only bring another burden to American families (Floyd, p.184). Finally, focus on colleges and universities themselves, which may change the price of tuition for these students due to their financial situation. Each of these problems, however, will greatly affect the agencies that will accept the bill, which could take years to resolve and ultimately resolve them(Floyd, p.185). Floyd’s perspective is that even undocumented immigrants still have the right to have their education, specific for those innocent children. Since there has majority student who spent their whole life in the United States and studies well, just because their undocumented identity they are not able to go to the college.
Romeo, Shirley, Edwin
- Y, copy directly from the resources, and no publish year
Y, it is not the correct in-text citation format, no publish year and page number
N, correct format
Y, it is not the correct in-text citation format, no page number
N, use the correct format
2. Y, there is no in-text citation at all, missing the published date, author’s name, page number.
3. Y, in parenthesis and should replace as “&”
4. Y, don’t have the correct full in-text citation, missing published date, author’s name, page number.