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Nov 8, in class writing

I think there is no leading role in my family. My parents love each other, so there is no kind of situation like only one person saying can be the leading role. In most of case, in my country, I think most of men are listen to their wife in now period. But in ancient time, women do not have status with men.

According to the readings, I think practical considerations are important. Because people can find who they want to with, and find each other equally.

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Nov 6, essay 2 feedback

After I review the draft, there are few points that I need to improve with my essay. First is the correct APA references (and in-text citation); second is correct Run-on sentences; Third is I might need to use research to prove some arguments, not my own experiences or own feeling;

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Oct 30 in class writing

Yifan Li

 Chi

Vivian

 1. Body language which includes the eye contact and gesture is really important to let audience to know what you saying, and minus the distance between the speaker and the audiences.

2. The presentation is not just read what you write on the slide and powerpoint, but show the media thing and the main ideas or thesis statement. Not only help the audiences to understand but also help the speaker himself to know what he is talking about, to make sure not deviate the main ideas.

3. The blank. It is not like printing or reading. We have to leave some blank of the sentences before talking the main ideas. That blank is attraction sights of the audiences.

4. Giving a short introduction of the speech, which is like a example or a story to introduce the topic and also organize the speech.

5. Before the speech, the outline is helpful to keep the speaker on track, which will include thesis statement, topic sentence and short explanation for examples.

6. Adding photos and videos or other media staff to attract the audience’s attention.

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Oct 28 in class writing

After I read the response from Yunfei She, I think her first paragraph is similar with mine, the similar part is about the education experiences of Pengfei, such as how difficult and how hard of Pengfei to go to school which react that the situation of China in that time, it is one of part to prove why there is global digital divide. Furthermore, she discuss some detail of the online essay which I didn’t, she talks about how images and video helps the audiences to understand the essay, it is good point, i agree with her.

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Oct 25 in class writing

For a long time, my stepson, Jonathan, was unhappy to has me as part of his family, for
he resents that he doesn’t have both biological parents at home. I tried to get to know him
better, but he would complains that I invade his privacy. As a newcomer, I understand that
our relationship will require effort from both of us. It is not enough that I am friendly.
Jonathan also has to want us to be friends, and I was not happy with the two of us being
strangers, but I can wait for him to feel more comfortable around me.
Activity 2
:
Anne Marie collects antique bottles and love to turn them into works of art. She would buy
bottles if she liked them, but she prefers to find them in the ground. She will find bottles
everywhere, but she picked them selectively. However, she has the best luck at
construction sites on old farmland, where she spent most of her time. Often, bottles
appeared on the surface after a good rain, but they disappeared very soon. She would use
special tools for excavating bottles, including a set of brushes. She does not want to break
the bottles as she removes them from the ground. After finding a new bottle, Anne Marie
will add it to her display case and hung on the wall as an artistic piece (Mangelsdorf,
2013, p. 411).
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oct 21 in class writing

The assignment of essay is about the video essay which introduces any major that we interested or our own major, the purpose of the essay is to help and inform freshmen or non-major students to decide major that we introduce .
So we need to do some research that can help us to introduce our major from library, academic documents or online documents which to develop our content in the video. It is also a practice for us to learn digital composition skill and use multiple modes of writing.
Our video should be 3-4 mins to express our main idea, the video made by Audacity or iMovie is good choice( depends on ability), try to make some simple edits with music.

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Oct 16 in class writing

1. My dog is not only friendly but also playful.
Correct: My dog not only is friendly, but it also playful.
2. We can go to the park or dancing in the classroom.
Correct: We can go to the park or dance in the classroom.
3. Jeremy likes to read historical, realistically and speculative fiction.
Correct: Jeremy likes to read fiction that historically, realistically, and speculatively.
4. When I went to the bar, I want to dance, drinking and punch on the rowdy faces.
Correct: When I went to the bar, I want to dance, drink and punch on the rowdy daces.
5. Buying a car is not a decision to take lightly nor be careless about.
Correct: Buying a car is not a decision to take lightly or be carelessly about.
6. Tyler is for the legalization, not criminalization of marijuana.
Correct: Tyler is for the legalization, not for criminalization of marijuana.
7. Sally needs a new stove, dishwasher and knives for her kitchen.
Correct: Sally needs a new store, a new dishwasher and a new knives for her new kitchen.
8. My first grade teacher taught me how to write, how to read and play tic-tac-toe.
Correct: My first grade teacher taught me how to write, how to read and how to play tic-tac-toe.
9. She will not admit it, nor will she be apologizing.
Correct: Neither she will admit it, nor she will be apologize.
10. The whole wheat pasta is better than enriched wheat pasta.
I think it is Correct
11. Literature classes teach students to analyze texts, thinking critically, and improve writing.
Correct: Literature classes teach students to analyze texts, think critically and improve writing.
12. Beets are just as nutrient rich as rutabagas even though they are not in season.
 I think it is Correct.
13. After correct: Drunk drivers are thoughtlessly taking the lives of other people in their own hands,
risking their own lives, thinking only about their own pleasure and fun, and not considering the consequences of their actions.
14. After Correct: In order to convey the information correctly, the police officer spoke loudly to the crowd, told people where they should stand, repeated the information to help people remember, and gestured.
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Oct 11, 2019 in class writing

Suguru Nagaoka

Yifan Li

This image is about part of caravan from thousand of Central American trying to reach the US. The situation of this image is this woman and her children are running away from tear gas which is spread from border between American and Mexico. The reason why we choose this image is the situation of the image looks so hurry and confusion which we can’t imagine that the children also need to suffer this terrible experience with their parents. We can compare our childhood with them, or we can imagine what if we face this situation when we were child, it’s feels like “we can’t go through this”. We think children should have some privilege in this kind of situation.

 

 

the image is from https://www.pulitzer.org/winners/photography-staff-reuters-1. 

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APA citation

As everyone know, when the war happened in  Tang dynasty, the masses have no means to live. But today, I’m trying to figure out what is the reason why army surrender at that time. And what is the matter in war.

According the research from Hung (2013), “It was already December. There had been no fighting between Li Mi and Wang Shi Chong for some time. During this period, food in the Eastern Capital ran very low and the price of food ran very high. On 22 December, some soldiers under Wang Shi Chong came to surrender to Li Mi.”(p51)

The research shows that the army under Wang She Chong surrender because they lack of food. so where the food come from? —the money, which is military expenditure. so, it is really important at Tang dynasty when war happened.

 

Referecence

Huang,H,M. (2013). Founding the Tang Dynasty : strategies that made China the greatest empire in Asia,       p51. Algora Publishing.