After watching Duarte’s speech, I understand her model of what makes a good presentation. However, I don’t buy into the idea that any great presentation or story fits into some standard model. I see good presentations and stories as more abstract than models. In a way, an abstract is arguably another kind of model, but I think only certain presentations fits into different models with varying degrees of accuracy or success. Duarte claims that her model can map countless famous addresses and presentations, but to what degree. Will it be as accurate as MLK’s “I have a Dream” or Job’s reveal of the Iphone. I believe it cannot be done. In fact, I believe no structured model will ever map a great speech with flawless accuracy. Which is why I see speech structures as abstract; they change, and adapt and will fit into some models and not others.
Importance of Audience to Me, as a Speaker:
The audience to me is an important aspect as a speaker. They’re the ones who will judge me, or critique my speech or presentation. They are also the people who will facilitate the action or initiative I will try to argue in favor of. Because I am only the speaker, the person to plant an idea and the audience will cultivate it.
Kinds of Audiences I want to talk to:
The audiences I hope to speak or present to one day are excitable audiences where people will clap, cheer, or applause, much like the audiences I experience in my performances. I also hope to present in front of experts and educated persons of specific fields so that we could collaborate in addressing a large problem like groups of scientists, doctors and so forth.
Difficulties on making an impact on my chosen Audience:
My greatest difficulty, in my view, for making an impact on the above audiences is mustering a large audience from both a scientific and research background and one that is excitable much like an artistic or layperson background. I have often noticed that these two different audiences are usually not together in a single crowd or mass. However, I have seen exceptions.
This is my best delivery so far.
It’s getting better!!
(I need to look up more)
As you can see this is a rough delivery of my second speech. I still need to practice.
Neumann, M. V., Eley, R., Vallmuur, K., & Schuetz, M. (2016). Current profile of cycling injuries: A retrospective analysis of a trauma centre level 1 in Queensland. Emergency Medicine Australasia(28), 90-95. doi: 10.1111/1742-6723.12495
This article is on the prevalence of different cyclist injury in Australia. They found that head injuries have fallen in rate and extremity injuries are the most prominent. I believe that this article is credible because it is reported in an academic journal and was researched by doctors and student in Queensland.
Osterberga, E. C., Awada, M. A., Gaithera, T. W., Sanforda, T., Alwaalb, A., Hampson, L. A., . . . Benjamin N. Breyera. (2017, January). Major genitourinary-related bicycle trauma: Results from 20 years at a level-1 trauma center. Injury, 48(1), 153-157.
This article focuses on cycling trauma cases at San Francisco General Hospital, mainly genitourinary cases. Most injuries involved the kidneys and bladder and the article goes into detail onto why it can or cannot be life-threatening if treated. The article is researched by doctors at UCSF at SF General Hospital and is an account of a 20 year trend.
In any multiple vehicle collision, there at least 3 impacts. The first is the vehicles colliding with each other, the second is yourself hitting your vehicle whether it be a car or bike and the third is your internal organs being pushed onto the walls of your internal cavities. For cyclists, there are often more than 3 impacts, because often the rider is ejected from the bike and collides with another object like the ground, a post or object. Today, I shall inform you all on the prevalence and classifications of cycling injury.
To begin, the Journal of Emergency Medicine Australasia reports that the common cyclist injury are extremities injuries with the upper-extremity being the more common limbs. It is often the clavicle (at a 10.7% incidence rate) or the radius (at a 7.2% incidence rate) that is injured or fractured. The second most common injury is the head often with facial fractures (8.8%) or skull fractures (8%). Third is lower extremity injuries with lower leg fractures the most prevalent in this area. The most concerning part of leg fractures, especially if it’s in the femoral area is that it could puncture a major artery and you could literally internally bleed out into your thighs. One of the most noticeable observations from this report is that the majority of cyclist whom are injured are men at over 85% of all reported and documented cases. In most of the collision injuries of cyclists, most cyclists do not collide and get injured from a motor vehicle but rather from hitting stationary objects and falls. However, cyclist who do collide with a motor vehicle of some kind is much more likely to suffer a more severe and life-threatening injury than a cyclist in a non-motor vehicle collision. Now of all the cyclists transported to a hospital or facility for treatment of their injury, especially a trauma 1 center, the vast majority survived at 98%.
Next, I will go into detail onto some of the injuries cyclist sustain. For an extremity injury, which again is the most common type of injury for cyclists, these include broken bones, sprained joint and bruises. This type of injury usually happen when a cyclist falls or collides with another object. And usually, depending on the injury require physical rehabilitation. Now if you may recall, the majority of cyclist injury are men and another type of injury is of the genitourinary system. Though less prevalent it accounts for approximately 3% of injury. The Injury Journal reported on San Francisco General Hospital that many cyclist admitted for genitourinary injury were for injured kidneys at 75% followed by bladder injury. A complication of injury of a ruptured bladder is its contents will leak into the abdominal cavity and lead to infection and eventual shock and death if left untreated; however, it can take up to a few hours. Chest injury and trauma is too less prevalent, but it can often be fatal, such as rib fractures, punctured lungs, pneumothorax (collapsed lung), or cardiac contusion (punctured heart). As humans, one of our natural responses when we face a threat, or in cyclist or driving, when we see we are about to crash or be crashed into, we inhale deeply then hold our breath. When the collision happens a “paper-bag or balloon effect” occurs in our lungs. To elaborate, the lungs fill with air, you hold your breath so air can’t escape, the impact hits and your chest is compressed and the air pressure basically “pops” your lungs. This is obviously a life-threatening injury. Finally, I will go into head trauma, the injury cyclists all over the world debate and protecting with helmets. Head injuries if of course potentially deadly. But, it is very difficult to detect and can often take time to develop. Some injuries include subdural and epidural hematomas or bleeding in the head, and neurogenic shock or hypotension; this is basically your nerves not sending the signals to keep your blood pressure up and all your cells can’t get oxygen and then die. Of all cyclist related injury or any injury for that matter that involves a collision at a high velocity, it will almost undoubtedly require hospital transport and treatment.
By now I have informed you all of the types of injuries cyclists sustain and their prevalence. I wish to state that cycling injury happen, but it is uncommon they do occur and rarely are they ever fatal. But if you do get injured, get help.
With only two student, one of which is myself , and the professor, the journey to see Critical Mass on Friday February 25, 2017 was in my view underwhelming. There was a small turnout of people whom congregated in front of the ferry building. Professor Hunt informed me that sometimes there are crowds of cyclists, but this time was very small. I did not participate in the Mass nor anyone else in the group. We went to get coffee instead and talk about life. After coffee we all went away. The professor estimated that the cyclists would venture off around 6 pm, however coming out from getting coffee at around 6:30 the people at the “Mass” were still there. They hadn’t left. I did not stay to see them sent-off.
Overall, I believe that this event of Critical Mass could have been much more exciting. But, I suppose there is next month. And hopefully there will be a larger turn-out.
I think my speech went well overall. I am very sure I need to work on my timing when presenting because it was difficult keeping within the time constraint. I was planning to add a lot more details and information. So I rushed through most of what I wanted to say and summarized most of the other topics. People probably saw that I was very shaky and I am not sure how am I going to prevent it. I sadly did not rehearse as much as I wanted too. But I hope the next speech will be better. Overall, the speech was decent in my view; I just hope I could engage you all better because I was not sure if you liked my speech or not.