During the Peer Review, I was working with Yuka and Jash. The discussion went well, except Jash didn’t give much feedback. He didn’t write feedback for Yuka or me, but he did comment on a few points. Yuka gave an adequate amount of feedback and gave me a grade. I liked to work in a group for peer response because not only I am able to see other people’s work and how they put the essay together, but I am able to get feedback and it allowed me to reflect on what I needed to work on. I just wish that we had a face-to-face conversation and more time to discuss the essay. I realized that Yuka’s feedback was similar to what I thought needed work on. I agreed that there were moments where my voice was too soft and that I needed to speak up more. Through her feedback, I was able to see what I could keep because I wasn’t sure if my personal photos or my tempo was suitable for the essay. Turns out, my personal photos and tempo were suitable for the essay. I just needed to work on putting emphasis on some sections of the essay.

 

Yuka’s Feedback to my Audio Essay:

4/4/3/4/5/5

I gave the first section a 4 because she presented her predicament in a way that was rather interesting and relatable at the same time since she talked about having to study for the SATs.

I also gave the second section a 4 because she uses her own pictures in the audio essay, which I really liked because it helped make me feel more connected to her story, in a way. I actually quite liked the picture with the goats because animals help me personally with de-stressing.

I gave the third section a 3 because, at some points, her voice became a little quiet which made it a little hard to understand what she was saying. Although her tempo throughout the audio essay is very good, I think that at certain points, there could be a bit more of an emphasis/variation.

I gave the fourth section a 4 because I generally liked the music she chose. The music never became too loud to the point where I couldn’t hear her or focus on her narrative. I think the music choice was good because it had the ability to fade slightly into the back without being overpowering or annoying in any way.

I gave the fifth section a 5. There were no weird sounds whatsoever, which resulted in a very pleasant listening experience.

I gave the sixth section a 5 as well because she properly cited her sources in the last slide.