—Essay 1 comments

In essay 1, I think I have many places that need to improve and correct; whatever the grammar and the context that I used. I realize there should have more my own stories or experiences in the essay, instead of the resources from the book or online. For grammar, I always have the issue of verb tenses, such as I used to mixed verb tenses, or missing the conjunction. So I want to give more my own story of learning and focus on the grammar issue which are verb tenses and conjunction to improve my essay 1, and I hope I can make the grade change better after revision.